How to become a true war hero

Essay by bballisawesomeCollege, UndergraduateA, December 2008

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When I read this story I believed it failed to successfully succeed as a true war story. I have a few key reasons on why I believe it failed. The story kept jumping back and forth, it was not just one war story it was many, and the way the man got into detail is three important reasons on why I believe this story failed. There is many other reasons why but I believe these are main reasons. Even though I believe the story failed the writer did get into great detail and showed people what war life is really like. The man also showed you what war does to a human being and how it affects the way you speak, act, and react to certain things when you are discharged from war. Now I will give you my three reasons with evidence with my opinion on why I think this story failed.

As they story kept going on it jumped back and forth. The man jumped around in his story, I would be reading about the letter from rat and then it would go into what a war story should be. If I was the writer I would have given my opinion on what I believe a war story should be then I would tell the readers the story of how the man was killed fooling around with his best friend. The story also added another story into while it was jumping around with the other two. The writer has to make sure all his stories are together as one not many short stories that jump around. It may get confusing for some readers and annoying to others. I became annoyed cause I would get into one story then another one would start. The story also confused me a little because the third story started talking about seven or eight men on a mountain top and I do not know if they went crazy or if they really heard people talking.

The story also failed because it was many short stories combined into one big one. It started out as rat writing a letter to his friends sister, then it went to what a war story should be about, then it went to being a half dozen men on a mountain top that either went nuts or just missed their targets. The man did indeed right a interesting story but it was confusing and irritating at times. As a reader getting into one story then have another one come up and I forget about the other one, this irritated me because I wanted to find out how rats friend was killed and I still do not fully know how it happened. The writer had me on the edge of my seat but also had me falling asleep while reading cause he kept jumping around. I also became annoyed at how the men kept trying to tell a story but it was not working out because the men did not believe him. The man should have just told the story and ask for the other soldiers opinion.

My final reason why the story failed is the way the man got into detail about everything. It felt like he was repeating himself on everything. He kept saying that rat is a 19 year old boy and how he acted. Well I believe people know what a 19 year old is like. The man also kept going on and on about how quite the men from the mountain where. People may have gotten the idea after the first or second time he brought it up. The writer also kept telling the readers how a war story should be, but all war stories are not the same. Different things happen to certain people at war. So if they had to be the same then how was a person’s story suppose to be different or more interesting then the next guys. Everyone has their own way of telling a story if everyone had to do everything the same way then everything would be the same and nothing would be different. I believe everyone has their own right to do, and or say anything how they choose.

My reasons for why this story has failed were given and I believe this is a very open topic. My three reasons are open for argument to but this is my feelings on this and people can take it however they want. The story was an all around ok story to me but it just jumped around too much and became irritating. The writer is a good writer and has good intentions but needs to stick with a topic until the point is across. This story made me want to read more at times but other times I just wanted to close the book or be done with the story.