Hatchet

Yours is a good essay written at the sixth grade level of elementary school. I wish that when I was in the sixth grade I could have written as well as you do. Please don't get discouraged as you show great talent for your age level. Keep writing as much as possible (daily if possible) and your writing skills will get even better over time. Fine effort!

i thought it was good overall but you need to add more detail and lenght and it would help to put things in chronological order, but overall not bad!

Your questions:What plane crash? How did the plane crash? How did the plane crash?

Here is the quote from the essay with the answers;


'When he is flying in the airplane the pilot teaches Brian how to steer. Suddenly the pilot has a heart attack and falls down. Brian is steering the plane but he doesn't know how to land and stop. Brian flies the plane until it runs out of gas so he goes down and crashes on an island.' That plane crash as written in paragraph 6

I like the repeated use of Brian as it gives the piece a nice rolling quality. I thought this was very clear and well-written.


To answer Holocentauri's points - the answers are in paragraph 6.

The story line is way in wack. You need to put the order of the ideas in chronological order first. Then you need to explain the stituations. For example, "he survives the plane crash." What plane crash? Why did the plane crash? How did the plane crash?

paragraph 6 only say that he survived the plane crash, not how. It gives no concrete detail. Then it goes on about how he survived in the wilderness after he sruvived the plane crash. In the whole essay, only one sentence bring up the topic of the plane crash and that sentence only states that he sruvived, not how or why.