My best friend Radar. Descriptive essay about my horse.
Descriptive essay
MY BEST FRIEND RADAR
When I woke up in the morning I knew that today is the day for
meeting my best friend Radar. Radar looks absolutely gorgeous. His
black expresive thoughtful eyes are always slightly sad. His
moisterous nostrils puff up, that is usually followed by sniffing.
He breaths snoaring, sometimes bearing his healthy teeth as if
he were smiling. His muscleous body with smooth skin, his
slender tall legs, his magnificently shaped head look the picture
of health and passion.
Every single day I look forward to meeting my faithful
friend , while saving for him his favorite dainties - pieces of
sugar. Shortly after getting to the race course I head into the
half-darkened barn. that pleasantly smells of fresh hay, mixed
with the familiar, warm smell of Radar. Inside the dark silence I
can hear him chewing. Suddenly, as soon as he hears the
grinding of an opening lattice door, he raises his head and the
rays of the sun, running through the small window, lights his
beautiful head up. I embrace his warm neck, kiss his soft nose
and offer him some sugar. He sniffs me round and I feel that he
is glad to see me as well.
Almost all day long we spend together. We walk around in
the green field, strewed with small,spring,colorful flowers. The
air is filled with smell of the fresh grass. I share with him all the
news I had gotten up to that time. And then, finally, splitting the
air impregnated with spring, we rush along across the field into
the distance, into the perspective, into nowhere. I feel the power
of my reliable friend, while holding onto his black mane. The
speed, moving the bodies in time, breathing - all of these...
Reviews of: "My best friend Radar. Descriptive essay about my horse."
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I had just happened to notice a couple of spelling and grammatical errors in the first paragraph such as "snoaring" which should be spelt SNORING. The Descriptive paragraphs were definitely good, but the grammatical and spelling errors threw you off. Very nice. 1/2 Smiley.
This is a good descriptive story. Does a good job of taking you to the event that is happening. Feels like we are right there with you because we can picture what is happening. Well-done.
Excellent formating and Alright Grammer you will be at the top soon just try to put a image in your head and proof read before you click sumit but i'll give ya a green smily face for doing a good job.
A short and sweet essay describing radar(nice name). We need more essays like ths. Wonderful experience reading it .
i love your descriptive essay- it really provokes the imagination and makes the reader feel like they're with you, experiencing the same feelings, emotions, and seeing the scenery that you are describing. there were a few spelling and grammatical errors, but overall, i really liked it
There are some grammar mistakes and lack of coherence, but this essay has a lot of feeling and potential
this is essay the typical descriptive essay but it does what it needs to do, "placing an image in your head."
Interesting story that is grammatically correct. Try to visualize before writing, this may help you iron out some of your writing.
the essay is very descriptive and provide people with the info they need. I believe this paper serves its purpose.
I like it the way you did. good job
well done, i just have to say i enjoyed reading this essay so much, it proves that writing can also make pictures. they say a picture tells a 100 words well with your 350 words your gave me an entire video, great
A fairly decent descriptive essay; non-direct and almost like a long poem. Many of the words you use paint a picture, but like I said it is more of a long poem then a straight-forward essay.
Pretty good, uses a lot of cliched terms though.
Not bad, good description that allows you to create an image in your head, but watch that grammar! Silly mistakes like that take away from any good points.
This was pretty descriptive but as others have mentioned your grammar could have been better.
Rule of thumb that I was taught to proofread is to read out loud to yourself, read it out loud to someone else and read it back words. Reading it backwards can catch a lot of grammar errors. It works for me, I hope it works for others.
I like this essay, although I think it is slightly repetitive with certain phrases. Overall, it is a very nice, warm, fuzzy, "feel-good" peice of writing that discusses the issue of human connection with other animals.
Well-done, successful imagery.
This was a decent, touching essay. Fix up the grammar =D
I thought you did a very good job.
Excellent formating and Alright Grammer you will be at the top soon just try to put a image in your head and proof read before you click sumit but i\'ll give ya a green smily face for doing a good job.
I thought your essay about Radar was interesting. I liked the fact that if you closed your eyes you could think about an image and it was like magically placed in your head.
Keep up the good work
Makes you picture the situation in your head. Very imaginative and poetic. Good Writing.
i hafta agree with what most people said before me it is a very good essay and with ues of ur descriptive words u hav placed a picture in my head. keep up the good work
very good story
I forgot to say in my last comment, this is in the wrong category
I enjoyed reading this- you're description gave me a clear picture in my mind. It was really interesting- I loved it!
Good job.
For something that was supposed to be written at a 2nd year level, the title could possibly have been slightly more interesting. Just a suggestion.
This is a really good essay. I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work.
Was a typical essay, nothing special, just enough to make a visual image, needs to be longer
This essay is decent, but it could use a little more..."fluffing up" with more descriptive words about the horse
I love horses too. keep up the writing your really good
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Overall decent
I thought your essay overall was pretty decent. I liked a lot of the descripitve words you used. My only concern with the essay was the tense you used. I would look over it and make sure that it all fits together and its going in the same direction.
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