The seasons

The birds sing .....and? we all ,know that birds sing, they can sqwark/ wax lyrical/call/speak/all sorts of things what do they sound like in your imagination?


Again I see you - why the inverson here?. If it doesnt serve a purpose dont do it


You seem a little uncomfortable and therefore develope a refrain in 'again I see you' - its a lack of confidence that you dont need. You are good enough without it.


I really like the flowers cycle and that of the grass, but the clouds are over-doing it a bit.


You have real talent. Play with a few poetic forms, this is very close to your others, and please keep writing

Interesting transitions, and -being a poet myself- I'm good at seeing deeper meanings. One thing that didn't sit well with me was the quick transitions from season to season. They were just a little too fast.

Also, you kind of switched from an "objective" form of speech, to a "personal" form of speech. The phrase "Again I see you" is personifying the seasons, yet the rest of the poem denotes that the seasons are objects. This, I know, is hard to separate, but it's a must for a poem to be effective. Keep writing your poetry. I'll always be there to give an honest rating.

I agree with PhantomPhan on his opinion, and I would like to add that is was good, yet somewhat short. More effects from the seasons would be nice also. Overall a great poem.