Wanting to die.

when i was reading your poem, my heart skipped a few beats. i have read other poems that you have submitted to cheathouse (which were all brilliant) but this one is by far the best. it is so touching, i had tears coming to my eyes when i was done reading it...

This was very good, however, I hope this is not your true feelings. What seems dark today, will be enlightend 2mrwo.

I read Hoba's comment but since I havn't read much poetry I can't validate it. This is by far your best poem submitted. It is very touching. This makes is quality work.

I have read something similar to this before. I think that you have taken someone elses poem and changed a few words and lines to make it your own...which would explain why it doesnt make sense in some places.

Pacojaleb wrote:


My stuff is mine and it just burns me to think you would think i could take credit for some thing i did not write. I have a very hard life with a few breif moments of sanity to cope with reality. maybe if you took the time to thourghly read them you might see the deepth that was put in to them. i have some of my stuff published in other places on the web under other names PAYNE ,HIPPIECHICK, Mandy, I guess that all i have to say


From Hoba

I havent seen it on the net. I said a couple of your lines were very similar to some poets I studied in poetry papers at University. I cant remember their names at the moment. I know the whole thing is not copied because the fact english is your second language shows in your poetry. And if you honestly feel what you are writing....wise up......what would that achieve?????? Write poetry on a topic that hasnt been covered as much...there is so much suicide poetry out there it becomes boring. Go and select a topic on something completely different, something unusual, write a poem, submit it and im sure it would be so much better. You have the skills to write good poetry, i just dont think that you are reaching your full potential......you are capable of writing better stuff than this. I have given it an average :| ill reserve the smileys for your better work to come.