Very nice analysis of characters. Your comparisons and explanations of minor details are also a nice touch.Good job!
- 18/12/2004
- 10:53:19
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It has all the right facts about the problem presented. But I doubt that the problem will be resolved any time soon. If anything it will worsen, because irresponsible parents ingrade poor eating habbits to their children and something that is learned during childhood is hard to un-learn. You say that its not addicting. Thats true. But it is gentic. Which is equally bad because major deseases such as cancer, cardio-vascular deseases, and obesity are all intertwined and therefor are gentically transfered. For example if you have been leading a totally healthy way of life but your mother is diagnosed with cancer, there is a 15% chance of the same thing happening to you. IF both your parents are diagnosed with cancer it jumps to 45%. And this is like i said if you lead a totally healthy lifestyle.
- 16/12/2004
- 11:18:36
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If you research this subject more you can see that our views on beauty can also be traced back to the prehistoric era. When physical appearace was considered beutifull according to the survival of the fittest rule.For example, why is it beautifull for a woman to have long hair, or wide hips. Because, wide hips are usefull for carrying children and in the colder seasons of the year prehistoric people used to wrap their infants in their hair to keep them warm. Big breasts mean that a woman can provide a good supply of milk, large eyes give a larger field of vision.I know this may sound funny and maybe shallow. But, physicall appearance is not just dictated by the media. Anyways just my two cents.Either way, its a good essay, but just wanted to add something
- 16/12/2004
- 11:09:54
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Its packed with interesting content and is a good quick read if you want to familiarize yourself with Jefferson and his beliefs on life.
- 16/12/2004
- 11:01:40
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Maybe my language settings are messed up.
- 16/12/2004
- 10:58:20
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Since you don't say what grade you're at.Overall not bad, but is too short and feels kinda rushed. Not really an essay, more like a summary.
- 16/12/2004
- 10:56:41
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I have two comments.1) Your essay was very biased, whithout appropriate back up of reasons for it.2) The topic you picked is not something that can be fairly analysed in 536 words, and without citations or sources of your ideas and facts.So, I say redo it and this time, keep in mind the comments we all posted for you .
- 13/03/2004
- 13:45:27
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I liked it a lot. I just watched the movie Twelve Angry Men in my Bussiness Managment class. And, I can see you did a good job on pointing out the main ideas. Very organized. And nicely structured.Good Job!
- 13/03/2004
- 13:31:18
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
You got all the facts right. And presented it in an interesting fashion. We just did this topic in one of my classes, and I still learned knew stuff after reading your essay.Great Job!
- 12/03/2004
- 15:26:15
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I liked this, it's detailed, has good qoutations, (some a bit too long) and has nice structure. Also a lot of interesting facts about the KKK, I never knew before.Great Job!
- 12/03/2004
- 15:23:28
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I'm reading Zinn too right now and I think you analysed it nicely.
- 06/03/2004
- 12:27:43
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1)Your essay is very sexist. Just because a woman has a certain natural physical structure compared to a male, doesn't mean that she can't be involved in bodybuilding.2) Bodybuilding is not done to get "ripped." It is an art form that sculptures a body to be perfect. Not perfect according to society standards, but perfect according to bodybuilding standards. They try to make their bodies symmetrical, proportional, etc., in muscle composition. And, you don't have to be disgustingly huge to win, you just need to sculpt your body according to what the sport considers "perfect."3) Women have not been allowed to participate in a lot of different sports until the past half-century, so maybe we just never gave them a chance to physically compete with males in physical strength. They are not off by that much in their physical capabilities, as we can see from the latest records set by women. So, the stereotypical image of a Barbie doll that has been set by men for women might be what has caused them to fall to far behind in physical achievements.
- 11/12/2003
- 19:34:26
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But, you should have broken it up into paragraphs.
- 11/12/2003
- 18:58:17
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My grandmother passed away last January from pancreatic cancer. I lived with her practicaly since birth. I miss her a lot.
- 05/12/2003
- 19:42:40
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Interesting content! I read some things about how California is not the best place to live, cause it's located on two active plates. The whole state is being pushed into the ocean, and divided into two. I don't know why people would live there, you gotta be either very rich, or very stupid.
- 05/12/2003
- 19:39:04
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It explains clearly why you think homosexuals should be treated equaly. However, if you ever read any books related to dfferent religions, you would see some of the points why gay marriages are "not right." A lot of different religions believe that a person is not born a homosexual. He gets that way because of all the perversions of modern society.Also, a lot of research has been done on this subject for the past decade, and they have done an experiment where different kinds of animals were pressured into watching sexual intercoarse of two people of the same sex. After some time the animals even though of the same sex started to have sexual intercoarse even though it has been proven before that animals are not born with gay instintcts, and DON'T develop them except for a few rare cases. But, after this kind of infulunce they just started mimicking what they saw.
- 05/12/2003
- 19:30:35
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Some of them are self-explanatory though(name-calling, plain folks appeal, appeal to tradition )
- 24/11/2003
- 10:51:23
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The conclusion should be completly revised. It's good ideas but you have to make it more clear to the reader.
- 24/11/2003
- 10:37:33
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I don't really see from your essay how his charcter changes. You should rewrite this, providing examples from the book, like the time when Tom kills the man who kills Casey, or when tom leaves his family to not be assosiated with them if the police come after him.
- 24/11/2003
- 10:25:21
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I read a book about the navy seals about a month ago, and you could have added some more detail to the workouts that they do, like the PT(physical training.) And, the underwater demolition techniques (special underwater knots)they use. Still, very informative and clean grammatically.
- 24/11/2003
- 10:12:15
- Score: 17 out of 17 people found this comment useful.
Yes, we shouldn't assosiate arabs to terrorists.But, I doubt that it's posible to fight terrorism without any aggeression.
- 21/11/2003
- 12:16:46
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.