This paper was poorly organized for someone in college. College students should know how to right papers. The paper was everywhere. He/She never focused on one point and proved that point. It was a little to bouncy for me. Check for sentence fragments and dangling modifiers.
- 08/11/2007
- 08:56:24
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I like the fact that he used links to further prove his/hers points. I thought he hit the subject nicely. Not too deep
- 08/11/2007
- 08:52:02
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You couldn't have been in HS when you wrote this. Very impressive buddy!
- 07/11/2007
- 15:50:01
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Nice job on the length of the paper. You kinda made it understandable in laymen terms.....lol...I appreciate that!!!!
- 07/11/2007
- 15:41:55
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I like the citations in the paper. I never knew that the government really had total control over us like that. This paper was very informative. I give it an A+
- 06/11/2007
- 14:09:15
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