Woha 8th grade?your right def high school material. Everything is set up good and is easy to read
- 28/12/2003
- 22:26:11
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This is a good solid essay, i really loved your concludeing essay. Also, your body was well thought out and was very informative to me
- 28/12/2003
- 22:17:13
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Your essay is missing a solid thesis statement and a concludeing paragraph. There are also many sentances that are too long or short, try to use this little thing more often ";".
- 28/12/2003
- 22:13:43
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you proved your point time and time again, looks like college work...oh wait it is. Great useage of complex and simple sentances and absolutely astounding usage of vocab!
- 21/12/2003
- 14:21:49
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This is a great essay and it really looks like you did some research on it, it was actully enjoyable to read. Also very informative, Regan was before my time so i didn't know much about him, but what you said was that he did what bush is trying to do, and he failed. But when you compare Dell and Alienware, i think you should have included what Alienware's goal is compared to Dell's goal. Dell's goal is to give computers to EVERYBODY, this means making the price cheap, but also making the computer cheaply (Intel Extreme GFX card???), while Alienware's goal is to get very high preformance computers to Gamers. Again, very good essay.
- 09/12/2003
- 23:16:38
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Well it isn't an essay i can tell you that, maybe notes you took in class, i am not sure. The info is good, but yet again this is a site for essays. Also, what is that stuff at the end of it? Please Proof read your essay before you submit it.
- 09/12/2003
- 20:27:00
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
After reading the essay i agree with smileey that you need more detail on what the topic is. I am suprised that you didn't talk about planes in WW2, they where the first time used in masses; In WW1 Hitler used gliders, but that was just about all that was used for air combat. But some of what you did talk about was very good like 1st, 2nd, and 3rd paragraph, those where very informative and well written. The rest seemed also well written but not nessary. Goot effor
- 09/12/2003
- 20:22:19
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.