its good but it doesnt read like an essay, you have lots of seperate sections not paragraphs that link to others, no real sense of continuity although in terms of content it is brilliant, if your interesetd i did a similiar essay answering various questions in an essay form, just clik my name to find it and mab you can fins sumthing usefull to you in it. keep it up :D
- 11/11/2004
- 15:27:11
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
although it its alittle unrealistic you put forward some good moral isues. very funny if a bit crude in places. good light hearted work. keep it up:-D
- 27/10/2004
- 07:24:35
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
this is gud but it almost seem like notes due to the fact of headings. content and language is excelent, good use of source material and nice to c a bibliography. good work. keep it up :-D
- 04/08/2004
- 16:36:40
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
fantastic essay, good use of source material. well done keep it up :-D
- 17/07/2004
- 16:35:36
- Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
good essay, great imagery and u put your views across stongly. However the entire nature of the site just screams plagarism, i agree with your view but when new members join the fact that the URL is cheathouse dosnt do much for ppl hu discourage plagarism... but on the whole your essay was good. keep it up. :-D
- 18/06/2004
- 14:41:51
- Score: 9 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
i like some of the parts of this 'saga' but others r weaker. there r quite a lot of unfilled gaps between each part. cudnt u compile them all into one essay... i mean there not that long..... ahhh i get it then u will only get 350 points instead of geti 3500 for all ur 'hard work'. the stroy is good but i think ur just trying to cheat the system by splitting them all up. good work though. keep it up. :-D
- 04/06/2004
- 10:43:14
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
this a fantastic essay u cover all topics and risks. you use statistics and facts nicely and the conclusion is to the point and does not just repeat previous comments. i find this essay flawless. However what is more important is that it is has good advice and as in previous comments its is described as 'eye opener'. i look forward to seeing more of ur essays on sensative topics.execelent :-D
- 20/05/2004
- 15:36:12
- Score: 9 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
this is a gr8 essay. u explain the asic facts well, it is clear and to the point. However there is no conclusion and i think u could improve the essay by expanding more on the 14 points of Wilson and why the German citezend were shocked that hardly any of his points appeared in the T of V. 1 other point u dont go into enough detail abut Wilson's principle of Self-Determination and his dislike for colonies. a couple of sentences would be fine. but on the whole it was very good with a fair amount of detail. :-) i hope to c more of your histroy essays
- 20/05/2004
- 13:11:12
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
this is a good essay. you state the facts simperly and combine it with good explanation. however it would be good to see more infomation on the subject of the differnt layers. overall it was a good esay. well done :-)
- 08/05/2004
- 10:21:20
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
this essay is well structured and generally thought out well, however the essay needs more depth adn explanation of the actuall prosses of Jem and Scouts maturity also u need to check the spelling errors 'They´' 3rd paragraph, but appart form that this essay is good.
- 08/05/2004
- 10:15:32
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
i think this essay is convincing. it is wrote with a strong opinion. you could try not to force your opiniions on people. perhaps you could say the deffintion of abortion is "the terminatioin of the life of a foetus..." taken from Anatomy & Phsiology Higher level. you could also try leaving your opinions on the issue to the the end of the essay and base your arguments and opinions on the points that u may or may not agree on that u mention erlier in your essay. on the whole ethough it was very well written and convincing :-)
- 24/03/2004
- 16:13:46
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
good use of source material, well structured, explains both sides of the arguement well. However it would have been goos to see some views and points from the perspective of a few different religions.
- 12/02/2004
- 10:21:06
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.