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  • Not An Essay

    This is not an essay, this is a list. Any 12th grade teacher who gave you an 85% on this should have his or her certification revoked! If a paper with a simple word like "science" misspelled in the TITLE is what fetches a "B" these days, then we need "education reform" now more than ever!
    • 16/11/2004
    • 14:44:39
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Well Written

    The only thing I would suggest is to try to write a bit more impartially. In a critical analysis, your opinion is pretty much irrelevant. Other than that, it's clear, interesting to read and informative. Nice job.
    • 03/09/2004
    • 19:35:56
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Stolen

    Geez, with all the time you spent stealing various parts of this essay from various internet sites, you (maybe) could have written something of your own! Plugging different sentences from "your" essay into google reveals that many parts of this writing were directly copied from elsewhere on the web.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 22:17:11
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Great Job

    Very fair and informative. Good work citing references, too.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 21:52:49
    • Score: 7 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Ok Thanks!

    Now I'm going to have nightmares! Hehe... seriously, though, excellent writing! Paints a picture without being "frilly"!
    • 29/08/2004
    • 21:48:09
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Oooh

    Wow--you have a gift for descriptive writing! I especially liked the part about the dry branches waving... very creative.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 21:44:55
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Oops

    At least the 1st paragraph of "your" essay was stolen from:http://www.trekfit.com/well/well_0002.html
    • 28/08/2004
    • 18:14:13
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Stolen

    You stole this essay from:http://campus.fortunecity.com/carthage/220/sci12.htmNext time try writing something of your own, either that or read CheatHouse's policy against using essays that have been posted elsewhere on the web.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 18:06:36
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Reported You

    Maybe you should read this website's policy against using essays found on other websites:"If you think that one of the essays on CheatHouse is directly copied from another site, please let us know immediatly. If you are right we will delete it without any questions, and we will reward you for your help.This happens sometimes, because some people want access fast, so they just steal an essay from another site. We want to keep good relations with other essay sites, so we will NEVER permit this behaviour."You've been reported. Stop filling up the essay sites with this raving garbage.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 18:01:58
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Faker

    Gee, "your" essay seems to be on a couple of other websites! How did that happen???http://www.unc.edu/courses/pre2000fall/psyc070c/nicotine.htmlhttp://www.sfn.org/content/Publications/BrainBriefings/nicotine.html
    • 28/08/2004
    • 12:03:29
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Elementary

    Over simplistic, over generalized, over dramatic. Plus your grammar needs tweaking.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 11:50:18
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Copycat

    You copied this out of a book/several books, probably one or more of the sex addiction books by Patrick Carnes. I know because I've read these words before, especially your list of "signs" of addiction. You must be quite unintelligent to have to pass off someone else's words as your own.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 11:44:44
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Contains No Concrete Information

    Not completely terrible, for a simple statement of your opinions and viewpoint. If someone wanted to know exactly what this person thinks about abortion, they would do well to read this essay. However, if someone was looking for factual information they wouldn't find it here.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 11:31:20
    • Score: 15 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
  • Bad Ending

    Ending your essay like this:"Or possibly I'm wrong. Whatever the case may be, the answer is out there, but no one will ever find it."makes readers think "well then why did I waste my time reading this?" It destroys your credibility! It gives readers a concrete reason never to rely on your writing for information. Develop some confidence, perhaps by doing more research and focusing more on facts than opinions.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 11:18:16
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Needs Evidence

    This is a nice opinion piece, however, it doesn't hold much weight because it doesn't have any evidence backing it up. There are citations in the text but no references. Add references and you'll boost your credibility.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 11:15:26
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Convincing

    Very convincing essay! You have biological/medical facts to inform readers and you have personal stories to really drive your point home. The only thing I would suggest is a seperate conclusion paragraph, as the essay seems to end a bit abruptly. Other than that, excellent job.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 03:19:06
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Needs Finishing

    You have a lot of unsupported facts presented here. Also, you need to remove the "titles" that preceed the different sections. Your argument would be a lot better if it were backed up with documented evidence. Sentences like "alcohol kills" are just too broad. Take some time and finish this up.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 03:15:31
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Well Supported

    You built a strong case here and included documentation--great job on that! I like the way you stay fairly impartial, and the way you presented the opposing viewpoint as well, that was very fair. Well written, obviously well researched...well done!
    • 28/08/2004
    • 03:12:00
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Very Cool

    I learned a lot by reading your essay! You seem very knowledgeable on your topic, which enables you to present your viewpoint quite well. Gives readers a lot to think about!
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:54:04
    • Score: 9 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Descriptive

    I like your descriptions, especially where you talked about what you felt while reading the book. I liked the letter format as well. Just fix the HTML tags :)
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:48:27
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Persuasive

    Like others have said, you make a good case! Your descriptions are vivid and exciting and your vocabulary keeps it interesting. Very nice essay!
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:45:18
    • Score: 7 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Simplistic

    The sentences are short, choppy and overly simplistic. There is no chronology--that is, no introduction/lead in and no conclusion/tie in--within each paragraph nor the paper as a whole. Needs work.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:42:41
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Good Point

    You make a very good argument, supported with some clear examples. Nice job.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:40:14
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Very Nice!

    Impressive review of this study! Very clear, concise and informative. Interesting, too!
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:37:17
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Funny

    Your writing is entertaining. I think you should have made it a bit longer, though. You pointed out the problem of cost, prefacing that issue with "first of all"... but then you ended the paper with no "second of all"... I guess what I mean is, I could have read more of your writing--nice work!
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:34:45
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Grammar

    Am I correct in assuming that English isn't your first language? If so, that's allright, your grammar was very close, but still a bit off the mark. Like the previous commenter said, proofread your work and maybe have some other people proofread it for you as well.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:26:46
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice

    Very nice essay, unemotional, free of semantics and thought-provoking. Good work.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:11:05
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Ugh

    Well ok, you support Nazi-esque government control... but I'm supposed to be rating the quality of your writing, so here I go:No college professor would accept this paper without an accompanying list of references. I mean, look at this, for example:"The country's status has slowly declined over the years and is only going to get worse."Prove it! Give me some EVIDENCE to support this over-generalized statement!Moreover, to what kind of status are you referring? Status as in per capita income? Status as in number of people on welfare? Status as in number of teen pregnancies? To simply state that our "country's status" is declining tells me nothing.I guess it's not horrible--for what it is, and that is simply an opinion piece.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:06:21
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Allright

    Good essay, I like the in-text citations. PSA-ish, but given the subject matter I suppose that's unavoidable. May need a bit more developing. Overall, not bad.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 00:57:12
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Complete Speculation

    All this is is a description of YOUR opinion. You have no citations, no references, no FACTS to back up any of your statements. Seriously, just because you think something is true doesn't mean you should present it as fact. Zero credibility.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 00:54:32
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Needs Work

    Seems choppy and unorganized, plus your grammar could use some editing. The main complaint I have is this: why would a college level paper include your personal opinions? That tears down your credibility.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 00:46:35
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting

    Nice article, very informative. Only thing is, you might want to double check your facts about root beer. I could be wrong, but I don't think it has caffeine in it.
    • 25/03/2004
    • 10:05:08
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Ha Ha

    Very funny and cute. Minor grammatical errors, and the end kind of drops off, but very enjoyable.
    • 04/03/2004
    • 09:48:08
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • What are you commenting on?

    You refer to an article, an study analyzing internet porn--but you never tell us what this article is. Readers have no way to know whaty you're talking about.
    • 25/02/2004
    • 23:41:52
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Yikes

    WAY too emotional. This is one big knee-jerk reaction written quite poorly. If you had displayed just a bit of forethough, you could have avoided looking foolish. Alas, that didn't happen. Next time you want to sell a point, avoid insulting the people/groups you disagree with. Using ad hominem attacks, (calling environmentalists ignorant, dense, etc) displays lack of conviction.
    • 25/02/2004
    • 23:37:55
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Good Paper

    I especially like how the author presents opposing viewpoints in an objective way. I think it is wise to admit agreement on some points while still disagreeing overall. Shows maturity in the writer. Very nice.
    • 25/02/2004
    • 23:32:07
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice Job

    Overall a very good paper, very thorough and original. I did notice a decline in formality towards the end, which may hurt the author's credibility. Other than that, very nice.
    • 25/02/2004
    • 23:26:58
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Idea Is Good

    I like the idea and feeling behind this poem. The author conveys sensitivity and kindness. I think the rhyme scheme detracts a little from the poem's emotion, and some of the vocabulary is a little immature, but overall a very noble effort.
    • 25/02/2004
    • 23:21:26
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Good Start

    This is a great topic and one that should be explored, in my opinion. However, there is some wording you might want to rethink, the last paragraph for example: it's only one sentence and fairly redundant.Also, you have in text citations, but no reference page.Go with it! :)
    • 25/02/2004
    • 23:13:43
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Needs Improvement

    Your \"thesis\", which I assume is the last sentence of your intro (and also your title) comes completely out of left field. Your intro talks about how hard it is to be a kid, then all of a sudden you throw in a statement about gay people adopting! Not a very good lead-in!In your second paragraph, you draw some pretty farfetched conclusions. You imply that teasing automatically leads to children not aspiring to be anything. You also throw around the word \"cursed\", which to me sounds silly and overly dramatic.In the next paragraph, you talk about dwelling on the past and how it affected your friend. Then at the end you throw in a sentence about school shooters! Where did that come from??You state a lot of opinions as facts in this essay and you have no substance to back up any of your ideas.
    • 25/02/2004
    • 22:11:14
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Tells Me Nothing

    You have told your readers nothing about lesbianism or discrimination against lesbians. There is no information in this essay.
    • 25/02/2004
    • 22:01:47
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Fluffy

    This is fluff. First of all, use of first person doesn't belong in a formal essay. Secondly, your whole point is that music can change your mood. So? Is this really important information? You back up your idea by talking first about people you know and then by telling a story about yourself. Doesn't exactly add up to "common knowledge"!Basically, quoting rappers in your essay makes your credibility nosedive. It's all downhill from there. Just because "music puts you in a different mood" doesn't mean anything--it means something for you, but it doesn't prove your theory.Needs major development!
    • 25/02/2004
    • 21:57:43
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Is This The Intro?

    Where is the rest of the essay? You kind of just dropped off there at the end. This might be a good introduction to an essay, however, an essay in itself? I don't think so.
    • 25/02/2004
    • 21:41:07
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting

    This is an interesting review of google.com's search engine. Could be a little more thorough and informative, but concise is good too!
    • 25/02/2004
    • 21:37:40
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Just Needs Sources

    This is an informative essay, however, with a scientific piece, a works cited page is a must. We need to know how you know all this stuff! :) Good job though!
    • 25/02/2004
    • 21:16:37
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting

    Good call on calling this an editorial ;)I think you present your opinions well. Maybe giving a little more information about the opposing viewpoint, and then debunking it would be helpful. A few spelling/syntax errors need fixing. Good start!
    • 24/02/2004
    • 10:00:22
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Not an Essay

    Who is Tabb?? You cite pages from a book I assume, and you mention the name Tabb without telling us what you are commenting on. You need references.The first few sentences make this writing sound like an opinion piece--it's not clear that you are explaining different points of view until you go on to talk about Moore. Again, references telling us who Moore is would be most helpful.There is no thesis, no introduction and no conclusion. Needs major development.
    • 24/02/2004
    • 09:57:08
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Needs Development

    First off, there are some potentially distracting gramatical errors that detract from the author's credibility. There are a few sentence fragments and punctuation errors which may give readers pause.Another problem is that there is no "works cited" page for this essay. The author quotes a few outside sources, but doesn't give credit beyond in-text citations. A references page might be beneficial.A few parts were a bit non-sensical, for example paragraph three contains this sentence: "Marquis is a strong pro-life, he feel that abortion is morally wrong, and that through act a person is deprived of life. His argument is based on the assumption." I think s/he meant to say "strong pro lifER" and "that through THIS act a person is deprived of life". This may come off as confusing to some readers.Another problem is that your thesis isn't clearly defined. From what I gather from the introduction, this essay is only supposed to give readers a little information on all three stances? If this is the case, a little more objectivity might be in order. In a very well written informative essay, the author's personal views remain unknown to the reader--in this essay, however, his/her views are quite clear.This is a good start, needs some work, but does have some potential.
    • 24/02/2004
    • 09:50:10
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.