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  • Mud

    a great description of your childhood, i liked the part at the end where you were describing eating the pie, the essay would have been more interesting i think if there were more parts like it in the composition. good work
    • 12/04/2004
    • 15:20:23
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    good narrative, you used the first person fairly cleanly, i liked how you were able to change proffesions, and still sound like you knew what you were doing.
    • 05/04/2004
    • 16:47:16
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Corporations

    although you covered many basic points with these three types of business, when it comes to corporations, even though they are taxed twice, they have a large amount of tax shelter from the government, which is why they can be so valuable.
    • 29/03/2004
    • 15:41:16
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Progress

    you should add a introduction to this essay, be carefull about just jumping into a subject matter.
    • 29/03/2004
    • 15:22:58
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Evolution

    your essay seems to be part of a greater essay, it seem a bit wandering.please remember that darwin only really was able to give evidence for microevolution, and others took that to mean that there was a possibility for macro evolution, somthing that is a great deal different that micro. there is much evidence that ancient peoples had more knowlage than we do today, and there is absolutly NO missing links, as a matter of fact, respected scientists have been caught fudging the facts, and there are many textbooks that have published lies in them, being taught to students as fact.
    • 29/03/2004
    • 15:21:08
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Quotes

    when you quoted the rock churches website they said that there is nothing wrong with the feelings we feel indeed we couldnt stop them if we wanted to,i disagree, there is such a thing as self controlyou quoted many people, websites, etc, but those quotes really did not make any sense, basicly your argument was: "look! if you want to have sex before marriege, forget the fact you disshonaring your parents, forget the fact its moraly wrong and give into your temptations, because its the popular thing to do, and besides, you'l never have the backbone to stand up to yourself ever any way!"thats the feeling that i got from this essay, there were not any really really strong points, and you used the bible out of context, having sex with your slave would have been alright because that slave was under the protection of the head of the household, just like a wife is under the protection of her husband.
    • 28/03/2004
    • 20:13:21
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Gay marriage

    even though you pointed out that it wasnt the point that a couple married to have children or not, you seem to have forgoten thatthis country was based upon morals, and gay marriage denies all semblance of morals. the essay was quite biased. you should write an essay comparing the two conflicting veiws from an unbiased stand point.
    • 27/03/2004
    • 13:54:09
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Cheerleading

    i dont think your title was quite accurate, even though the essay was very descriptive, it was more of a descriptive essay, trying to put into words what you felt, i liked many of your descriptions!
    • 27/03/2004
    • 13:49:32
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    a excellent summary of the problems this drug has caused, and why it was banned. keep up the good work
    • 26/03/2004
    • 17:58:58
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Format

    i liked the clean way you formated your essay, good job.
    • 26/03/2004
    • 17:56:53
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Summarary

    this was a excelent summary of the poem
    • 25/03/2004
    • 13:50:47
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Well...

    you named a number of different points in your essey, but you really did not tell us much, do some more research and then rewrite the article, i think that you will do a much better job then. are you a entreprenuer? or did you just do this for a school paper. good luck
    • 25/03/2004
    • 13:46:03
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Very good

    you mentioned in the article that you faced little competition, i would from personal experiance say that this si not the case. true, you do not face much professional competition, but nearly everyone has someone they know (neighbor boy etc) that is perfectly able to take care of their dog. i think the market definatly is short on in home grooming services, great idea, but the house sitting market has alot of competition. great idea, i loved it, i think you covered all of the bases, be sure to check extra hard on what the market can handle, that is one of the most common mistakes businesses mak, thay dont do enough reserch. if you turn this into a business, please let me know how it goes.
    • 25/03/2004
    • 13:40:08
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Skiing/ skating

    the essay was slieghtly rough, it was repetative in several places. in the introduction you stated that skiing is better than skating, while i personaly agree, you never proved that point. perhaps next time you write a camparasive essay, you should try to write it in a differantt format, for example, try writting a paragraph talking all about skiing, and then a paragraph about skating, that would help to eliminate the repetativeness of your essay.
    • 24/03/2004
    • 21:05:26
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Racism

    this essay was informative and well written. the writter was able to give a clear history of the way racism has been changed
    • 24/03/2004
    • 20:51:29
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Communism

    this essay was slieghtly erratic, i'm still not sure weather the writer was for or against the practises of the men he biographied. unfortunatly, the writer did not seem to relize that the puritans came to america to practise religious beliefs, that was the point of coming from america, the seperation of church and state was formed to prvent what had happend in britain, they did not want a forced religion. they held their practises to keep their personal religion pure, and so when these men were fighting comunism, they were trying to keep the country pure from comunist's, unfortunatly, thay had the wrong reasons, and their activitys can be dubbed racist etc. this essay did have some valid points concerning that topic, but also had a rather confused thesis.
    • 24/03/2004
    • 17:47:09
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Profiling

    i liked this essey. the writter was forthright, and very clear. covered the topic well, and gave a excellent history of the subject.
    • 23/03/2004
    • 18:28:06
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • C.s. lewis

    i can see where you wanted to go with this essay, but you left out a which book you got the lewis quotes from, you should introduce him better. as well as give a background on why the scripture passages relate, that was unclear as well. the intro was very well defined, but the rest of the essay was ratherjumbled because you left out the context of the scripture, and/or lewis quotes, was this supposed to be a book report?
    • 20/03/2004
    • 14:43:41
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • College work

    although the writing style was rather sloppy, the thesis was very relevant, especialy to many of the patrons of this site. the writer did not back up one of his points very well, that point is, 'high school graduates won't get a very good paying job.' While at the same time the writer also stated that work experiance before college increases your chances of a better job after college, because you did better in college from your work expeirience before college. besides this, the writer did a good job giving examples of why getting a job before college is good.
    • 15/03/2004
    • 14:49:36
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Marketing

    this essay was good because it covered many of the basics, these can be applied to other busness strategies and therefore this essay remained intereting and valid.
    • 11/03/2004
    • 22:46:24
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Taylor blake

    i thought that it was to much like blake's essay on 'the case for prayer in the public schools' and was just paraphrasing what he had said there. although content wise it was a good essay, he really did not say anything new that he had not said in his previouse essay.
    • 10/03/2004
    • 19:33:15
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.