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  • Thoughts

    I never came across the word grenada so i had to do a bit of background reading first.Here's a good comprehensive link:http://www.cia.gov/cia/publications/factbook/geos/gj.htmlBut as others have commented, i indeed learnt a lot about this country through your essay.
    • 13/01/2005
    • 11:59:42
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    A very interesting read even though it's a bit heavy for my understanding i got the gist beacuse of an appropriate structure: good paragraph lengths, sentence structure and subdivision. Good work.
    • 13/01/2005
    • 11:48:47
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Okay

    This is a pretty okay essay not due to the content but because of the structure.Your stuff i felt was all over the place primarily because there were not enough paragraphs to effectively divide your arguments.Otherwise the content was pretty informative.
    • 12/01/2005
    • 07:26:47
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    This essay did better work at anaylizing than my english teacher!.A fact im not happy about.Nice work.
    • 12/01/2005
    • 03:59:57
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Further thoughts

    Does this mean not to place trust in organisations such as the BBC and CNN as well? It is indeed shocking that the media has no sense of right or wrong, especially in todays world where it is very influental on peoples minds.A very thought provoking and well written essay, just like your speech on euthanesia.Well Done.
    • 11/01/2005
    • 04:47:17
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    pretty good essay, informative and well structured.Well done
    • 10/01/2005
    • 16:29:04
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    a very good essay going into ample description. Well done
    • 10/01/2005
    • 15:49:13
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Wow

    A very powerful speech. It was emotionally rousing and its arguments were well set up and executed. Even the tone of the speech was flawless throughout.Though i felt that you focused on economics a tiny fraction too much. The purpose of this speech is to argue for humanity and emphasis on economics, "wasting doctor's time" doesnt kind of fit into the tone. It fits into the bigger picture, yeah but not in the tone you have set.Apart from that your speech was pithy, even though you proclaim otherwise.Well done.
    • 10/01/2005
    • 10:56:47
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    even though this essay was coherent and informative, you could have done a bit more of Skinner's proffesional biography.
    • 09/01/2005
    • 04:31:29
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    u explore advertising in great detail, yet fail to do it eloquently. I felt parts of the essay were longer than needed and other parts vice versa.
    • 08/01/2005
    • 06:28:51
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    This was a very well structured essay, one of the few i have seen because it incorporates your opinion backed by evidence rather than just retelling the story.
    • 08/01/2005
    • 06:18:18
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Wow

    A very articulate and informative essay. It covered everything necessary to describe a country and for all its detail i never felt that it was boring.Well done
    • 06/01/2005
    • 06:25:26
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Very interesting

    an extremely well written essay. Hard to believe the author was from the eight grade.Makes me wonder in what light would the doctors down the path a century or so look at our treatments and procedures, especially with all thats happening with extensive research.
    • 06/01/2005
    • 05:54:13
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Too short

    just that..too short
    • 03/01/2005
    • 02:58:23
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Ummm...

    sounds more like a history lesson than a diary entry.
    • 01/01/2005
    • 05:19:21
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Wow

    This essay is extremely well written. Not only informative but it also has a very interesting beginning and is capturing throughout. I learnt quite a bit. Thanks.
    • 01/01/2005
    • 05:16:10
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done

    this is perhaps one of the best essays iv seen from a sixth grader. No wonder you got a 100%. Well done.
    • 01/01/2005
    • 05:08:09
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    an excellent analysis, a lot of textual references and very interesting, well done.
    • 01/01/2005
    • 05:03:56
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • So whats so psychological about it

    even though there is tons of information here, i dont see the relation between psychology and consciousness.
    • 31/12/2004
    • 18:21:15
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Okay

    this was a very insightful essay, especially when you related it with the real world, however i thought that there were not enough references to the text to make your arguments effective.But on the whole, a good job
    • 31/12/2004
    • 18:14:26
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent

    A very powerful essay and to the untrained eye, very informative. Though i would also have been interested to know how these changes compared rome with other civillizations, especially the chinese who were very advanced as well.
    • 31/12/2004
    • 02:31:27
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Essay

    this was a very good read on a very unconventional topic. The ideas have been well thought of and they have been put in adequately into the structure. Excellent and very probing use of rhetotics and some extremely good points. This is one of the best reads so far.
    • 16/05/2004
    • 01:05:29
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting

    This was such an interesting read that at the end i found it too short for such an important aspect 'plot and theme development'.A very well written and structured essay. Well done
    • 16/05/2004
    • 00:59:32
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    i agree with what yoli17 has said. It is indeed a very different viewpoint from conventional essays. But i think u have to go one step further at the begining. That is defining what insanity is. It is a fairly broad term and u need to specify it down before relating it to the novel.
    • 15/05/2004
    • 23:08:14
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Fine comparison

    This is a very good comparison between the houses. You have provided evidence and your ideas flow in an organised fashion.
    • 15/05/2004
    • 22:38:31
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • The Reality

    The reality is that this is an extremely inaccurate essay on sikhism.Firstly sikhism is not at all violent. It is a very peaceful religion. However, if threatened, it will go to war and not as ruthlessly as u have said here. Infact the sikhs did provide medical support to the injured in the battlefield. Sikhism is a very gentle religion, however it does not allow anyone to abuse it. AND Sikhism has not changed since Guru Naknak, it is still the peaceful religion it ever was.Though there are elements of thruth there are many inaccuracies and i think there are many stories, like the police paying 1.70. I am from India and for a fact i know that this is completely untrueThis is a very badly done essay. You couldve improved it by:1. Focusing on the change of belief in god. Sikhism, unlike other religions says that the teacher is to be respected more than God. The Gurus (Punjabi for teacher) were people who showed the way to god, they were not god and they were not sons of god. This is a very important change in Sikh philosophy that your essay does not provide.2.You couldve said a bit more about its history, how it emerged in the 1400's, what was the need for Guru Nanak to have a new set of beliefs, how it was constantly under pressure from Islam from the 15-18 century and how it constantly protected those in need of its protection from Islam, mostly hindu pandits(priests).3.You have not really talked about how Sikhs worship. There is no mention of Gurudwaras and religios events throughout the year.4.You have not talked about the sikh way of life like Importance to women etcThis is an extremely bad, one dimensional essay. Even though Sikhism has its own set of problems it is not the type of religion you have portrayed it to be.Much more work and research was to be done to make this essay much more effective, accurate and complete.
    • 20/04/2004
    • 07:48:22
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This is a good essay though it lacked one main thing - you did not cite the source you have based this on.
    • 16/04/2004
    • 02:13:30
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Thoughts

    A very good summary of quantum physics. But in the last paragraph u have said something new that has not been explored in your essay. 'So, as you can see, quantum theory has made an important impact on 20th century physics.', You have not explained how new theoretical science has shaped experimentation and interpretation of natural phenomenon. This could have been done by citing some experiments and applications of Qunatum physics.However as i said before an extremely articulate essay and an excellent summary for grade 8
    • 04/04/2004
    • 05:16:17
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    I agree with bgiff1010. This is an extremely informative essay. Short and to the point while determining many important aspects of the disease.However I wouldve liked to know its current status with the areas most effected and in what ways.
    • 02/04/2004
    • 20:40:57
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Who is Beautiful?

    A very thoughtful essay on a very important issue to a person How do we define beauty? You really explained your point by including many examples.PS- DOn't worry im sure you're beautiful. The only question is : Am I Beautiful???
    • 01/04/2004
    • 21:50:33
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • I learnt a new religion

    An extremely informative for 1000 words as it briefly covered many important issues such as interaction of mormons with different religions and issues inside the religion.It was also backed by historic evidence which gave a good idea of its place in American History.However I wouldve liked to know more about the philosophy behind this religion like how it is practiced and what makes a man a morman and how this differs from Christanity.
    • 01/04/2004
    • 21:41:24
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Technology

    A well structured essayHowever i think that it wouldve been good to define the term advancement before actually proving your point.'During World War I, technology was advanced for it's time'. How? How do we define which technology is a good advancement? Do we look at its uses or its complexity or the amount of energy inputed for this advancement or a combination of these all? How was technology in WW1 advanced. Peoplke were still dying of common things like tetnus and unhygenic conditions.Because we take all the things mentioned above as granted like rubber, missiles etc i did not realize the full potential of the development of these applications. It wouldve been good if you could have compared the growth in the world wars with that of today eg introduction of Genetics(tissue regrowth), stem cells, smart bombs, intellegent computing systems etc. This would have aided my understanding of the rate of growth in those eras.
    • 01/04/2004
    • 21:32:15
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Well Researched

    This is an extremely well researched and articulate essay. It describes the benefits of cloning by exploring the many applications it could have. These applications have also been well developed by providing situations under which they will/could be used.There is a good flow of ideas which made it extremely interesting to read, no serious gramatical errors and an overall excellent structure.
    • 01/04/2004
    • 03:29:19
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    The ideas were all over the place though the essay is very informative. There is a lot of needless repetition for instance you concentrated too much on selling drugs and attention seeking. There could be a lot more than that like parental influence, peer pressure which could also have been explored.On a different note and seriously are you a member of any gang?
    • 01/04/2004
    • 03:14:25
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Informative

    Overall this was a very informative piece of research. I havent seen many of these and it was nice to have a viewpoint on a new subject.The content was well balanced and theoretical ideas were well supplemented with applications. Nicely done
    • 30/03/2004
    • 02:16:15
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This is a very informative and interesting essay to read on America's involment in Iraq and the options and descisions it has to make.
    • 30/03/2004
    • 02:08:55
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent

    I never knew that Harry Potter went so deep as to discuss the matter of different races, even though i have read them a lot.The essay was nicely done, u went to quite some depth to make your point.I agree with Jiji that you have indeed brought an excellent topic as a theme in Harry Potter
    • 24/03/2004
    • 06:46:14
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.