the arguements in this essay are very valid, but the language used is not suitable to an essay. In an essay, it must be noted that there should be no use of the words "i,we, us". instead, use words like "the reader is made to feel..."
- 19/06/2004
- 01:39:26
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Although it is good at times to repeat words to put emphasis on them, too many repeated words and phrases in the story makes it tedious and strectched out, as if the author is rambling on. i presume that the narrator is Ben but the story really does make it a little vague and hard to guess, perhaps a few more clues and maybe some quotes would help.
- 30/04/2004
- 04:32:09
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i liked the fact that it gave many relevant information and statistics on women in Australia. it is also great that it had an interval with a woman who went through the post war era. the interviewed also gave her personal opinions to some questions, which was also useful. this is a primary source and and very valuable and hard to find.
- 31/03/2004
- 06:38:46
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.