nice job of getting everything in there! your citing was great, just watch some of the spelling and grammar next time! :)
- 16/04/2004
- 08:44:00
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Nice citation of the quote(s) but watch your grammar and spelling.
- 16/04/2004
- 08:42:21
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You typed this in incredibly fast, there are many spelling, grammar, and word use errors. Take your time. Also, you didn't finish the plot, you just left it with a cliffhanger (and not much of that either).
- 16/04/2004
- 08:38:25
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There are too many uses of \"you, us, I\", etc. Watch out for those if you are trying to write a formal piece of writing. There are also many grammatical errors and sentence fragments. Take a little more time to develop this piece, the idea is there, but the effort is not.
- 16/04/2004
- 08:35:57
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.