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  • Rushed

    this is a blurb, not an essay. Although it is a very informational blurb, there is alot of areas that you could expand into from this.
    • 10/12/2004
    • 08:33:51
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Room to grow

    You have alot of potential, however there is still room for improvement.
    • 10/12/2004
    • 08:22:51
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • This comment is going to lose me some points...

    Although you have written this well in a structural sense, it is far to opinionated. You offer your beliefs (which I don't disagree with) however you have presented them so your breif essay has become a breif rant. You also didn't address opposing arguments, which could be beneficial to your essay if you discredited other sources that contradicted the beliefs in your essay.
    • 10/12/2004
    • 08:14:52
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • I say no.

    Although your journal entry is decently stated, it is not well typed, or well argued. Some of the literary devices that you commented on are in place in that book for a reason... just because you don't like the way the author wrote the ending doesn't mean it isn't effective. That and you seem to have some issues with tenses.
    • 08/12/2004
    • 07:14:12
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Short and ok

    While I find your blurb to be very interesting, it is only a blurb. However it is a well written blurb at that!
    • 08/12/2004
    • 07:05:14
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmmm...

    This is somewhat interesting... now I can make my own root beer.
    • 08/12/2004
    • 07:01:30
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • OK

    A very informational blurb, however some of the paragraphs should be merged.
    • 08/12/2004
    • 06:57:27
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Good, but sources?

    Good Information, and good writing in general. But, do you have any sources?
    • 08/12/2004
    • 06:48:56
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Ummm... ok but way too short!

    Although your writing style is good, as well as very clear and understandable, your "essay" is not an essay... it is a paragraph!
    • 11/11/2004
    • 10:34:58
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • A paragessay?

    How can you call a paragraph an essay? IT IS A PARAGRRAPH, NOT AN ESSAY!!!!!!!!!!! Other than that your paragraph's writing style is very rushed and ranting. Other than that you did make a few good points in your paragraph!
    • 11/11/2004
    • 10:21:14
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting...

    Overall this sounds like an interesting topic proposal. But, be sure to watch out for some spelling errors that a computer may overlook, such as "quite" when I belive you meant "quiet" (referring to parents keeping their kids content, in the section titled "Kids are Important"). Also watch for capatialization errors in headings and titles.
    • 09/11/2004
    • 13:47:45
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    This is a pretty good essay, although you do need to watch your in text citations.
    • 24/10/2004
    • 20:32:02
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice paper

    your paper was nice and very informational, however you need to CITE YOUR FACTS!!!!!!!!!
    • 10/04/2004
    • 09:28:50
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Incredible

    This essay has alot of good recolection, and attention to detail without exaggerating easily exaggerated spots!ENCORE...BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!
    • 09/04/2004
    • 20:08:21
    • Score: 21 out of 22 people found this comment useful.
  • No

    Although you have a couple of interesting points, your essay falls far from any of the meanings of Ray Bradbury's short story "There Will Come Soft Rains." The focus of that story is not the 'magnificent machines' built by the humans, nor is it the dog, nor is it the nuclear infestation...look closer!
    • 09/04/2004
    • 20:01:50
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice Essay

    I really liked this essay. Good Job.
    • 28/03/2004
    • 17:29:38
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • OK

    A nice review of what sounds like an interesting book.
    • 28/03/2004
    • 17:06:02
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Punctuate!

    It looks as though you have done a great deal of research on this tooic, however it is essential that you punctuate...especially in your lists of companies, CEOs, etc.
    • 28/03/2004
    • 16:50:40
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    A good essay that brings up some good points. Be careful of some tenses, and commas though.
    • 28/03/2004
    • 16:38:21
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • YAY!

    A very good portrayal of this character, his personality shows in this entry.
    • 28/03/2004
    • 16:29:21
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • WOW

    Very good. I liked how the emotions were portrayed as "soul mates".
    • 28/03/2004
    • 16:25:00
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Good.

    This is a good essay, however, an introduction and a conclusion would help. Also try not to use the word "stuff".
    • 28/03/2004
    • 16:18:45
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • OK

    Overall it was pretty good. You could have included some of the feud betweem Mary Queen of Scots(James Stewart's mother)and Elizabeth. The introduction and conclusion could have been stronger, and at times it was a bit choppy.
    • 28/03/2004
    • 12:41:10
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • YAY!

    I liked the essay as a whole, however, the thesis statemant is not clearly made, and "Dance Dance Revolution" could be abbreviated or used as a pronoun everyonce and a while. Repition of that phrase gets to be a ltiile redundant.
    • 28/03/2004
    • 12:29:27
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.