You need to be more spcific for example ....plots to kill every one that gets in his way. Gets in the way of what? If you haven't read the book you don't know. :)
- 25/04/2002
- 19:57:22
- Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
Great essay I totally agree with all of your opinions. People complane about taxes being so high yet they condemn a woman for haveing an abortion. Whitch ultimently saves tax payers money because just about every child that is born unwanted ends up in foster care.
- 25/04/2002
- 19:52:26
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
Wow, you must have had a tough teacher to give you a 74 on that. I think it was very good. I only found a few gramitical errors. However it's one of the best and most intersting that I've read. Great job!! :)
- 25/04/2002
- 19:44:09
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This would be a great essay for a 9th grader. I'm not saying it's not a good essay because it is. However I'll have to agree with the teacher on the grade. I think it was fair. I feel that the use of a few sophisticated words would greatly inprove the impact of this essay. :)
- 25/04/2002
- 19:35:00
- Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
This essay contains plenty of good info on No.4 However, you need to join your sentences using transitions. As of now your paper lacks an air of disction.
- 25/04/2002
- 19:12:56
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.