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  • Great

    This is a lovely essay, very clear, concise and it has a sound analysis. Well done!
    • 13/12/2004
    • 06:31:35
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Great

    I was really interested to read this as the Scottish Parliament have also recently passed a law that will come into effect in 2006, banning smoking in ALL indoor public places, i.e. clubs, pubs, restaurants. People here cannot believe it has happened, this country is predominantly working class and EVERYONE here smokes, the non-smoking population is by far the minority. While people completely understand this is WHY a ban has been issued (the cancer rates in Glasgow are the highest in Europe), nobody here can see how it will work. A gradual ban might be more effective. The bottom line is that people smoke, everyone smokes, very few of these people are going to stop. This ban will probably benefit the next generation, but it will either hit business very very hard, or businesses will completely ignore it.I am a non-smoker myself, and I agree with smoking ban in, restaurants, for example. But banning smoking in pubs and clubs is entirely unrealistic, and I do not think it will work, people here will not stand for it, and I actually really think that clubs here will not stand for it. This country has a massive drinking culture and that goes hand in hand with smoking...the city can also have a very violent nature and a lot of people are not going to take to being told they can't smoke in a pub very well.The country is also made up of many rural villages, where, for a lot of people, their only social outlet is to go down the local pub for a drink and a smoke...what will they do?I've gone off on a tangent here, sorry, but I did find that particularly interesting, especially as you say the ban appears to be highly unpopular...and I imagine New York has less smokers than Glasgow in the first place.Great essay, really thought-provoking, well researched - you certainly had statistics to back your argument up. The only thing I can think of that might improve it is to include information about people's reactions to the ban at first...did they flout it, or did everyone accept it grudgingly?well done!
    • 12/12/2004
    • 06:49:08
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Great

    This essay is great - very thorough, informative, with references and a really enjoyable read. You provide evidence for both sides of the argument. My only comment would be that your language could be a wee bit more formal. Other than that though, I thought it was great!sex, drugs and music - my three favourite things.
    • 09/12/2004
    • 11:59:42
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Come on...

    This is not an essay, it's just over 200 words long and its about ULYSSES, that book is huge. I don't think cheathouse should accept this, it's probably just copied from a blurb.
    • 09/12/2004
    • 11:47:04
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    This is good but you need to paragraph it, otherwise its a drag to read.
    • 09/12/2004
    • 11:44:43
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Not an essay

    This doesn't even have paragraphs, and is less than 300 words. Some of my comments on essays have been longer than that. This isn't an essay.
    • 09/12/2004
    • 11:42:51
    • Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • ...

    People not from America, like myself, might not understand the school system or grading system that cheathouse asks users to enter their essays under. There is the option of the English school system Scotland has a different system from that too, and I'm sure there are lots of cheathouse users that aren't American or English. Don't judge the essay so harshly on the categories it was entered under.
    • 09/12/2004
    • 11:40:20
    • Score: 4 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Its ok

    I'm Scottish and I don't understand the school systems or grading systems in America but this essay isn't too bad. No offence if I am wrong, but the writer often forgets the plural i.e. "help" instead of "helps" and if this essay is entered under the wrong category then perhaps it is written by someone who has english as a second language? I wouldn't be so harsh.I do apologise if I am wrong about that.The essay is ok, there is a clear opening and conclusion, lots of references and statistics - my only advice would be to brush up on grammer, then it would be a lovely essay.Well Done!
    • 09/12/2004
    • 11:36:37
    • Score: 4 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmm

    I'm not sure about this. This essay provides very detailed thought but there is no clear opening, and you do not explain philosophical terms, which I think is essential to a good essay.
    • 09/12/2004
    • 11:30:41
    • Score: 3 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Ok

    This essay is alright, try and structure it a bit better to improve it. Nice essay though.I do have a problem with your apparent ignorance about Mary Queen of Scots though:"The Virgin Queen's prosperity demonstrates an fascinating comparison to the fatal destiny of her cousin, Mary Stuart, who was incapable either to perform her personal needs or to retain control of her realm as a married woman."Things are not as black and white as this and history always has a tendancy to be depicted from the English perspective. Mary Queen of Scots was not trying to gain the English throne, she was far more concerned with trying to retain her own throne as Queen of Scotland. This was mainly because as a Catholic, and of French descent, there were many conspiracies to unseat her, by the Scottish protestant nobles as well as the English protestant queen. Bearing in mind Elizabeth pretended to befriend her then executed her after keeping her in 18 years of imprisonment away from her son.
    • 09/12/2004
    • 07:26:03
    • Score: 4 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Fair Enough

    Nice wee essay, even if I also think conservatives are very wrong...well done!My only comment is that it wasn't Reagan who 'won' the cold war. Gorbachev is the one who promoted all the peace talks between America and Russia - he won the Nobel Peace Prize in 1990 (or 1991, i cant remember) for his efforts towards global peace.Other than that though, a nice essay! Keep up the good work.
    • 09/12/2004
    • 07:07:21
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmm

    Don't want to be harsh or anything, but this is way too short, has nothing of any interest in it - it is basically a summary of the life of an extremely famous star. This information could be copied and pasted from anywhere, it doesn't include any original thought or anything.Sorry...
    • 09/12/2004
    • 06:57:49
    • Score: 2 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Great

    Nice essay, a good read. Marketing is evil.
    • 09/12/2004
    • 06:55:11
    • Score: 1 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Lovely

    The structure and form could be improved, but the idea for this is lovely, and it comes across really heartfelt. Nice.
    • 09/12/2004
    • 06:51:48
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Re: sweetodorsbleed2

    Great essay - i agree with sweetodorsbleed - can't say much more.Well done!
    • 08/12/2004
    • 16:17:52
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Great Essay

    What a lovely concise and informative essay. Death of a Salesman is a fantastic play, and you have done it justice by writing an insightful and sound analysis. Great!
    • 08/12/2004
    • 16:15:57
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Alright

    This is alright, but its a really difficult poem anyway, and I think you could have explained the classical references better as I have read the poem and still didn't really understand. What are the Muses?
    • 08/12/2004
    • 12:25:48
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Fantastic

    It is so great to finally find an essay on this site about homosexuality that isn't homophobic - how refreshing...everything you say id true. Homophobic people are so ignorant - I wish people would realise that who you are attracted does not matter, or have any affect on what kind of person you are. Its all just chemicals swimming around in the brain, nobody can help who they are attracted to. The idea that they can is ludicrous.
    • 08/12/2004
    • 06:01:57
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Drugs

    This essay is ok, although rather short, but you include statistics and information to back your argument up.Although I agree that drugs can ruin peoples lives if they get into it too much, it does annoy me that there is a widespread misconception that all drugs are bad. There is a risk when you take drugs, but any drug user knows that. Drugs such as mushrooms have a really low risk and are really fun. Ecstacy if taken regularly is dangerous, but every now and again is great fun as well. Its also not addictive.If people know the risks of drugs and still want to take them I really don't see anything wrong with it. Drugs just get a lot of bad press because they are illegal. Taking Mushrooms and acid though, give you such a bizarre, out of this world (or out of your mind, rather)experience that you will never experience otherwise.
    • 07/12/2004
    • 04:33:09
    • Score: 7 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Inspiring

    This is a lovely reflective essay, and I'm glad your mum and yourself are better now, it must have taken a lot of strength to do that. I think this is very well written and i've rated it good.My only comment is that my experience of drugs is completely different to yours. The people I know do not use drugs as escapism (and many of them have been using drugs, cocaine, ecstacy, speed for 15 or so years), but socially. Not always, obviously, but sometimes its great fun on a night out. Not everyone who uses drugs becomes addicted, most people in fact don't, although addiction is obviously a large problem. I think the main problem is that people are not educated enough about drugs at school. If people are taught the risks, taught the dangers, and also taught the affects, good AND bad, then they would be able to make a more informed choice. I wouldnt take drugs to make me happy if my life wasn't going so well, cos thats how addictions start. But It does make a good night out, as long as thats where it stops.Lovely essay though, and very moving...well done!
    • 07/12/2004
    • 04:25:01
    • Score: 8 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Great

    This is a great essay, concise, structured and you put across both arguments well. It was an interesting read.I got plenty of good skelps when I was wee and it didn't do me any harm, or make me feel the need to hit anyone else. I think children recognise that the person hitting them has authority, and usually, if their parent is a good parent, their judgement on whether or not a child's act deserves a skelp should be respected. I KNEW that i'd done something very wrong if I got hit and I made sure not to do it again. Similarly, If i had already done something I knew was wrong I was already regretting it at the thought of getting a skelp and vowing to myself not to do it again!There has been an anti-spanking law passed in Scotland recently which I think is just political correctness gone mad. There is a difference between a skelp and physical abuse.Great essay - really thought-provoking!
    • 06/12/2004
    • 06:45:55
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Crucible

    This is a good essay, structured well with a sound analysis. My only advice is that perhaps you could have mentioned how the ideas in The Crucible were linked to Communisim (The Crucible was written at a time when the US were fearful of Communists). Also, perhaps the reason why Proctor slept with Abigail may have been partly due to the stifling atmosphere of the ideology he lived in. Whatever the reason, this fault of his only helps to portray him to the reader as a normal, real person. Everyone has faults.Great essay! Well done, i really enjoyed reading it. The Crucible is a great play.
    • 06/12/2004
    • 06:33:38
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • AIDS

    Would just like to agree with grapey - this sort of misconception annoys me. Other than that the essay is good.
    • 05/12/2004
    • 11:47:10
    • Score: 4 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Touchy

    If you submit your essays to cheathouse you really have to accept that they will be rated, good or bad. If you don't care about your essay then why are you so touchy about it?
    • 05/12/2004
    • 11:42:46
    • Score: 1 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • More

    what makes me more angry is that people are rating this good...
    • 05/12/2004
    • 11:39:14
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Ignorance

    Whoever wrote this is just ignorant. I've written so many angered responses at essays just like this on cheathouse and im just sick of it now. It is just sheer ignorance and it makes me really angry.
    • 05/12/2004
    • 11:38:43
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Robert Frost

    This is a nice essay. I'm studying Robert Frost as well at the moment and it was nice you cited your references, that'll be a big help. Thanks.
    • 05/12/2004
    • 11:05:43
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Marijuana and Alcohol

    These two drugs are not addictive. Certain people may become addicted to them, but these people are in the minority.I'd wager the person that wrote this essay has never smoked a joint in their life, because their perception of what being stoned is like is rather inaccurate.Cannabis and alcohol are the least harmful drugs around today, there are many arguments why cannabis should be legalised. In Britain the drinking age is 18, and it is lower than that in most of Europe. There is nothing wrong with taking either of these drugs, and I think that if you really think there is, you should have more facts, statistics and references here but this essay is merely your opinion, which, it seems, is completely misinformed.People do not NEED drugs to have fun, they never have, but it's certainly a lot of fun taking them, and always has been - so what's wrong with that? You only live life once. I'd rather enjoy it.
    • 05/12/2004
    • 11:02:28
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Religion

    This is great. I am not in the slightest bit religious, although I simply do not know what I believe so i'm not an athiest. My main problem with religion has been addressed here. Institutionalised religion is horrible and corrupt. If a person really believes in God it should come from inside. Nice essay.
    • 05/12/2004
    • 09:40:47
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    This is a nice essay. My only comment would be that deviance from society is not always a criminal act. Or, if it is a criminal act, it may not be harming anyone else in society despite the fact it is a rejection of social norms. Examples include drugs which are not addictive or socially harming or perhaps graffiti which is arguably a form of art.You did a fantastic job of explaining the different sociological theories. Nice essay!
    • 05/12/2004
    • 09:34:30
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Fantastic

    Really really good, contained all the main points and answered the question well and concisely. good work.
    • 05/12/2004
    • 08:23:19
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    This is a good essay describing the bad effects of drugs, but its use of facts is selective.All the side affects of cannabis you mentioned, they don't matter at all, the drug just relaxes you, often makes you giggly. The disorientation is just part of the fun.Acid can also be amazing. When you take it, you're given a perspective on the world that you will never experience by yourself. Everything is bizarre, you get really giggly, things look really pretty, you hallucinate, but you're usually aware that you're hallucinating because you've taken acid, so its not scary, its fun.Cocaine makes you feel great, and talk for hours and hours and hours. Really addictive though.Good essay but really one-sided.
    • 05/12/2004
    • 07:55:42
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Good essay

    I thought this was a good essay, very informative and very in depth. well done! I agree with you that schools should educate on the risks of drugs, definately, but I don't agree that everyone who takes drugs becomes an addict.Ecstacy isn't addictive, although it can be dangerous if the user isn't aware of the risks. Cannabis does not have very many risks that aren't also related to tobacco, and cannabis also does not have to be smoked.Mushrooms are also pretty harmless, except for the risk of a bad trip, but I think there is a risk with everything. If people are aware of the risk and still want to take drugs then its really their choice.I think its addictive drugs such as cocaine and heroin that need to be addressed as they really really fuck up people's lives.Great essay though!
    • 05/12/2004
    • 07:46:37
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Great!

    I'm studying this at the moment as well, I thought this was a lovely essay, well structured, well thought out and with a good analysis. A pleasure to read!
    • 05/12/2004
    • 07:30:31
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Good essay

    I think this is a good essay, clear, concise and well structured. Very one-sided argument though.
    • 05/12/2004
    • 07:25:30
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Drugs

    Usually people who use drugs as escapism take heroin or crack, which are very extreme and addictive drugs. Ecstacy isn't addictive and is usually taken when clubbing.As long as people are aware of the short term risks (overheating) they can greatly decrease the risk (by drinking water and taking breaks to cool down). The long term risks of ecstacy are unknown, but if people are aware of this and still want to take it I don't see what is wrong with that.People will always do what they want. I think it is better to inform the child of the risks of drugs rather than paint it as entirely wrong (as that will only be more appealing anyway, and the child will then take drugs, realise how much fun they are, think that people have lied to them about drugs and then risk their lives because they are not aware of the dangers and how to decrease the risks.)I know plenty of people who live successful lives and have been taking ecstacy, cocaine, acid, speed but whose lives are completely fine.I also know people whose lives are consumed by drugs.I think people should be educated better about the risks of drugs and what to do to keep safe when taking them, rather than just being told not to take them at all.Drugs are fun, as long as you know what you are doing, when to stop and what precautions to take.
    • 05/12/2004
    • 07:24:45
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Length

    The essay was supposed to be 2000-3000 words long. Might have gone a bit mad with the thesaurus though!
    • 05/12/2004
    • 07:08:17
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Nicely done

    This is a lovely essay, well structured, well thought out with a controlled use of language. It was a pleasure to read. :)
    • 04/12/2004
    • 10:23:39
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • I don't understand...

    You've titled this as book notes and lecture notes from the first chapter of a book...is this your summary or have you just copied and pasted notes that you've found? I don't really understand, so I can't rate this...
    • 03/12/2004
    • 13:18:15
    • Score: 4 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice

    My only advice is that you could perhaps expand on the last point you made about the conflicts he finds himself feeling between the Duchess and her brothers. He realises all too late, I think, that he does not have to be corrupt in order to be successful and 'advance' - he could have worked under the Duchess who was a fine example of an important figure within the court.Good essay though.
    • 03/12/2004
    • 13:15:52
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Oh

    Maybe I'm missing something here as well, but it seems odd that its entered under Diseases, unless that was a mistake?
    • 03/12/2004
    • 09:02:32
    • Score: 7 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmm

    For a 2nd year, this is pretty bad. Its way too short, is more of a story than an essay and is full of spelling mistakes. Not very professionally done. I think for a topic as controversial as euthanasia you could have tried a wee bit harder to address the topic properly.
    • 03/12/2004
    • 09:01:39
    • Score: 8 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Bloody Brilliant

    This was amazing, a really professional short story, I could feel the dread running though me as I was reading it - it seriously awoke all my emotions. Well done! Write something else, quick!
    • 30/11/2004
    • 08:54:35
    • Score: 4 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Ok

    This is ok but you need to structure it into paragraphs and I would probably put in more stats. Also, you seem to have forgotten to attach the end of it. Informative essay though with some controverisal theories.I don't agree with not giving aid to developing countries, I think countries like America and Britain should deliver non tied aid frequently and without interest as we can definately afford it.Tied aid and high interest loans only increase the problem of third world countries. Much of the problems and poverty in sub saharan africa are created because rich countries have given high interest loans that mean developing countries will NEVER be able to pay it back, all their resources are put into paying back this money leaving no money to put into developing education and getting rid of poverty. Also, much of the aid given by us is tied aid. Cash Crops in Sudan and Rwanda are a good example. We give the countries money to buy crops but dictate what crops they should grow and who they should buy the resources off of (us, obviously). The countries then have to buy the resources off us, expensively and are unable to look for a lower price.We also dictated exactly what crops were to be grown in these coutries, getting it completely wrong. The climate and the land was wrong for the sort of crops that Britain and America decided to be grown and the result was the crops were ruined, money lost and Sudan was in even more debt than before without haivng any way to pay it back.Also, all the land was used in the cash crops, taking away land from local farmers and thus taking away the ability of local people to grow their own food, thus contributing to the poverty of the country.The only non tied aid given to developing countries is by Non Government Organisations. Everything and anything given by governments or the world bank is generally pretty evil and is ALWAYS tied, meaning that the country giving the aid will benefit from the aid given as well. Rich countries never seem to be able to give the aid because they genuinely want to help and I think thats extremely frightening.
    • 29/11/2004
    • 09:15:28
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmm

    I think there was a lot to the film than just marriage, but I guess for such a short report, it has some good stuff in it.
    • 26/11/2004
    • 16:52:25
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmm

    This essay is ok, however I don't think you have answered the question very well, possibly because you have never read any other Revenge Plays?The reason that Hamlet could be described more as a tragedy than a revenge play is because Hamlet is NOT really an avenger. He doesn't know what he wants, he procrastinates, he thinks too much, he's not sure if what he is doing is right. In short, he is not your average protagonist in the revenge genre. In The Spanish Tragedy and The Revenger's tragedy, the characters barely hesitate to avenge, only circumstance prevents them. Hamlet delays because he is not sure.You say that he does not deal with his grief well, and that his passion is what brings him down. Hamlet has little passion, he is a thinker. And, to be fair, he doesn't deal with his grief well, but he IS being haunted by the ghost of his dead dad, telling him to kill his uncle because that's who murdered him. Its a bit harsh.All the deaths that occur in Hamlet are the result of his non-action...had he just killed Claudius (there were MANY occasions when he could have) then the plot would not have gotten so complex, Ophelia would not have gone so mad, and fewer people would have died.The tragedy in Hamlet is that he is not really a revenger, he is forced into a very unfortunate situation and his inability to make a decision is what turns the play into tragedy.
    • 26/11/2004
    • 15:02:42
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Mascochism

    Interesting essay, although it might have flowed better with clearer paragraphs. Also, perhaps leaving summaries to the conclusion might have helped with the structure. On the whole though, well researched and informative, great work.
    • 26/11/2004
    • 12:35:03
    • Score: 4 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice

    I liked this essay. Informative, concise and very well written. A nice read!
    • 24/11/2004
    • 16:35:30
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Capital Punishment

    Good essay, like Petra says, your argument is strong and you don't stray from the point. Even if I do disagree that capital punishment is acceptable.
    • 18/11/2004
    • 16:10:32
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    Good, just too short.
    • 18/11/2004
    • 16:05:41
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Twisted

    not only is this really sick and twisted (which i guess is either your aim, or its your fantasy) but its also a really crap story. Its so repetitive. Sick and twisted and you're shite at writing. Good work. not.
    • 15/11/2004
    • 14:35:05
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    I rated your essay good because I thought it was well written. However, I suppose I am pro-choice, although morally, I completely agree with what you are saying. When I was younger I was completely anti-abortion. However, as I got older, although believing a child is a child at conception, I began to realise the importance of choice. Its selfish, yes, but I could never ever have a child right now, for the childs sake and mine. Yes, the child has a right to live, yes it would be selfish of me, but yes, I would also have an abortion, although this would definately not be an easy thing to do. I feel this is a view thats reflected in many young women today. A child would ruin my life. Full stop. I take every precaution there is to make sure I don't get pregnant, but accidents happen and nothing is 100% effective. I'm too young to look after a child.On a less selfish argument, what about rape victims? I think there are few people that could go through with the birth of their rapists child.There needs to be choice or else there will be abandoned children, illegal and dangerous abortions, more children in unstable homes and perhaps murdered children (after birth) because of it.I agree with jmk12345 though, you do seem to be very passionate about the subject and it is a good essay. Even if I disagree!
    • 15/11/2004
    • 14:17:46
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Lovely

    I thought this was a really really lovely essay and very well written. There is close analysis of the texts and I thought the poems you picked and the order in which you discussed them complimented the essay very well. Brilliant piece of work and a pleasure to read. well done.
    • 15/11/2004
    • 14:05:09
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Ok

    This is quite a nice essay with some strong analysis, however you seem to focus mainly on how her work relates to her life. Undoubtedly she is a confessional writer, but people seem to forget she had success as a writer before her death (and her life) became famous. I think it is important to seperate her life from her work and read her work for what it is...poetry.
    • 15/11/2004
    • 13:38:52
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmm

    I studied Russian politics for a couple of years and I have to say, I think this is a really nice summary of Stalin's first 5 year plan. Very concise, informative and with all the facts there. My only advice is that your opening is weak. You should introduce and explain what this is a report about more clearly. You do not actually explain what the five year plan is, what it was for or what the circumstances were surrounding it. Other than that, a nice report. well done!
    • 14/11/2004
    • 09:39:54
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Homosexual Adoptions

    I agree with what you are saying, but I think your grammer needs a bit of improvement and the essay could be structured better as well as be a bit longer. Good work though.
    • 13/11/2004
    • 10:36:39
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    This is a clearly structured, well thought-out and informative essay, well done! My only advice to you is that perhaps you should have more of an opening setting out what you are going to discuss in the essay and a clearer conclusion summing everything up. On the whole though, a really nice essay.
    • 13/11/2004
    • 10:29:30
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Good essay

    This is a good essay, clearing putting both arguments across and ending with a clear conclusion. Although, I have to say, in Britain, uniforms are mandatory in most schools. I hated wearing a uniform at the time, but my parents also did not have a lot of money. I;m sure as hell that the uniform saved me from a lot of bullying over my clothes. It also did nobody any harm. Kids wear their own clothes and express their individuality outside school.
    • 11/11/2004
    • 17:36:49
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Yellow Wallpaper

    This is a nice essay, but I think you should have talked more about her repression and less about the wallpaper, since it is that is the real cause of her problems. She is not fragile, as her husband would let you think, and it is his constant protection, and the oppression of her actual self that causes her misery and obsession with the wallpaper. She has nothing to do, is driven out of her mind with all the restraints (as you said in the last line). On the whole a nice essay, but you should develop the idea of oppression more, the wallpaper was only a metaphor.
    • 11/11/2004
    • 13:27:24
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Great

    This is a great essay and I thought it was very very well done! Homosexuals have to deal with so much shit from ignorant people and this is just made worse by the law not recognising their rights. One of these rights should be the right to form a union between two people of the same sex that is recognised by law. Screw everyone else's views, it doesnt matter if they are against it or not, America is about equality, and everyone should have equal rights whether Protestants or Mormons or anyone thinks so or not. The law is there to protect people against prejudice and to enforce equality. At least it should, anyway.
    • 11/11/2004
    • 13:19:02
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • This is not an essay

    Anyone could read the blurb on the back of a book and derive that from it.
    • 08/11/2004
    • 18:05:03
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice

    I thought it was a great wee essay. Informative and concise.
    • 08/11/2004
    • 18:01:40
    • Score: 4 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmm

    You give nice descriptions here, you have a nice style of writing. However, you're not actually saying anything. Nature is powerful? It is, what about it? I think you need to develop your ideas a bit further.
    • 07/11/2004
    • 16:24:37
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • You havent researched this enough

    First of all, have you actually READ any of Shakespeares works in any great detail? It appears to me, through your obvious lack of knowledge, that you have only read chapter summaries on Sparknotes and the one book of criticism on whose theory you base your entire argument.You are actually asserting here that no works of any great value, no masterpieces, could ever come from any human being that has not had at the very least a university education. Mozart, for example, composed his first major symphony at the age of 4!Secondly, if you had actually read any Shakepearean plays you would realise that Shakepeare does not have any understanding of Law. He does not need to since he deals with the problems of human nature in his work, not matters of Law. The most probable reason for him to set his plays in the courts of the upper classes is because he was writing for a living. It was his job, and his job was to entertain an audience. This audience is made up of all classes. The upper classes were essentially more important (money) to please, therefore his plays would have to relate to the upper classes in order to keep them interested. It was just the custom. No one in Renaissance England wrote about people in the slums of London. They (unfortunately) just werent thought of as important enough to write about.He also does not claim to know about other countries customs in any great detail. He doesnt claim to. Note how mostly, all the people in Italy have English customs. The reason very few plays are set in English courtrooms or palaces is simply to avoid being accused of treason. Corruption is a strong and ongoing theme in Shakepearean plays and to suggest that it took part in an English courtroom, or palace, would basically be suggesting that corruption took place in Queen Elizabeths monarchy, or in English Courts. To suggest that, particularly when Queen Elizabeth herself was occasionaly in attendance at the theatre, would be very risky indeed, and not at all worth his while.Many of Shakepeares plots and storylines are taken from other sources - its just intertextuality. All artists borrow off of each other - thats how humans progress. Its the way Shakespeare put everything together - his shrewd insight into human nature, his wit and his ingenuity in writing is what makes his works still thought of as masterpieces almost 600 years on.I don\'t want to diss your essay or anything, I thought is was well written, I just think you are very very wrong, and to make the assertion that Shakespeare was a fraud, you should really have researched a lot more.
    • 07/11/2004
    • 16:19:30
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Bad

    I find it hard to believe that this person is in junior high 9th grade...I'm scottish as well and im not sure how old a person is in 9th grade, but i find it strange that a 9th grader (how old is that? 10? 11? would write about people who work in an Office. I apologise if I am wrong. I also thought the story rather pointless, with no real plot or climax or character development and really not very creative at all.Sorry if im being harsh, perhaps the person who wrote this didnt know what 9th grade was either and just guessed, I dont know.You could strengthen this piece by creating a better plot, ie something that leads up to a climax, has a clear point to make and some character development.
    • 07/11/2004
    • 13:12:06
    • Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmm

    Its short, and you don't really explain anything here. You give some analysis but you really have to include some extracts from "Birches" in order to back up what you are saying.
    • 30/08/2004
    • 12:34:52
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Mirror

    This is a lovely poem and I really enjoyed reading it. Its so difficult to write poetry, particularly when it rhymes, and I thought this was really well done.
    • 30/08/2004
    • 12:32:37
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • But you cant just look at things in black and white like that, johnjjp

    The Soviet Union, Eastern Europe and China are the ONLY examples we have of Communism. You cannot judge a theory just by one example. And it only is one example, although many countries were communist, they were only satellite states of the USSR, it was a whole empire (with the exception of China, but that area is complicated) that had control.Firstly Marx believed that Communism could only work when the current political system (capitalism) exhausted itself. And he believed that would happen naturally, just as feudalism collapsed naturally when it just was not working anymore, it could no longer sustain itself sue to industrialisation. Capitalism has not done that yet.Secondly, he believed that communism would only work if the whole world became communist. The very foundations of capitalism are that of competition. The very foundations of communism are that of equality - they are diametrically opposed concepts. So to have half of the world communist and half of the world capitalist - with both sides desperate to show the other that their system was better - was just a recipe for disaster.Stalin, like Hitler and other such fascist leaders were dictators. It is unfortunate for everyone that Stalin gained power, but has very little to do with the political theory of communism.However, Stalin was determined to show the critical capitalists of the west that his empire was better than theirs. He took everything to extremity and put all his efforts into competing with the West, an idea that defies the very point of communism. All the resources went into strenghtening the military, and furthering the economy. But he had no real long term goal. While the economy grew at unbelievable rates, it was not stable as resources were being sent to the wrong places, the empire was secretly in turmoil as Stalin went mental slaughtering an estimated 20 million people.He partly created the Cold War, the biggest competition imaginable between the two superpowers of the world, and, again, competition is against the very founding ideas for communism.Not only that, but originally the Communist party in Russia was fragmented, its original purpose was to overthrow the Tsars (monarchy). It was split into two main groups, Bolsheviks and Mensheviks. The Mensheviks wanted Communism to be brought about peacefully and democratically. The Bolsheviks were impatient for a revolution. It was the Bolshevik revolution that kickstarted the rise of the Communist Party in Russia and thus the Soviet Empire. There are so many events surrounding the establishment of Communism around the world in the 20th Century that it is not really a prime example at all to argue the case against Marx's Communism.The Soviet Empire followed one form of Commnunism - Marxist-Leninism - and the rise of a man as extreme as Stalin could not be predicted. The fact that capitalism is still functioning around the world and does not look ready to collapse is another factor that must be considered.Any system whose opposes the concept of competition yet was forced to engage in something as huge as the Cold War cannot possibly survive.And if the Mensheviks form of Communism had won over the Bolsheviks, that communism had come about democratically and through a parlimentary system, then who knows what might have happened.I don't think that you can judge Marx's theories so quickly when the only non-theoretical example had circumstances that were as extreme, and did not completely support Marx's own personal theory of Communism.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 12:41:19
    • Score: 9 out of 22 people found this comment useful.