Some grammatical errors. Other than that great structure and readily thought out.
- 09/05/2004
- 17:06:33
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
it is informative butvery generalized. it has some simple sentences an the structure could be worked on also u can work on the concluding paragraph
- 08/05/2004
- 13:55:12
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
restructure the ending
- 08/05/2004
- 12:03:29
- Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I can see from te good structure of this essay that it was well thought out and carefully planned. i give it two thumbs up:)
- 08/05/2004
- 11:54:59
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.