Well written, but a bibliography or references would be lovely:)
- 25/03/2005
- 23:13:39
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Good Work, but bilbliography and references would be nice:)
- 25/03/2005
- 23:10:38
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I completely agree! This is a very well written concise piece. After all, how much of a 'punishment' really is being put to death? It is much more taxing to spend years in jail contemplating ones fate and as you said, remorse and rehabi,litation are possible
- 27/02/2005
- 05:56:54
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This essay is well structured and articulated. I agree that the film is a masterpiece and whilst it may contain defunct archetypes, it provides the enticing suspenseful narrative.Well done
- 28/09/2004
- 22:58:14
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This is a thoughtful essay, however, in renouncing prejudice, you accidentally put forth a stereotype in referring to African Americans as'Blacks': "Gays became to see themselves as an oppressed minority group, similar to women and blacks". Also, referring to women as aminority group may notbe what you are trying to convey. i think you meant that women face prejudice, as do homosexuals; yet women are NOT a minority group. Underrepresented perhaps, yet not a minority.However, cohesive text and thoutful analysis of a pressing social issue.
- 29/08/2004
- 03:35:25
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well written, but you submitted it twice!
- 29/08/2004
- 03:27:49
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I fail to find a degree of analysis in this text. Is Attenborough's portrayal of Gandhi a candid one, or is it shrouded? Does the audience observe both the good and the bad? Is Attenborough conveying a 'magnificent failure'?
- 12/08/2004
- 06:38:05
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good points. I agree that Piaget's theory is the most practical at the current stage of investigative psychology and social science. However, it would be beneficial to mention other theorists such as Vygodsky for comparison.Well done
- 09/08/2004
- 05:10:05
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Very informative, cincise and coherent:)thankyou
- 15/06/2004
- 08:39:29
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This really helped me with my essay:) Thankyou for an insightful commentary.
- 15/06/2004
- 08:24:55
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is an OK piece. Im just confused what it is for. Is this an exerpt paragraph from a larger text? or a short response?etcWhy did you use:"Cuz", dont use that in an essay mate:) otherwise, good points
- 24/05/2004
- 08:30:10
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This is one of my favourite books:) and i think you have given a great review of it.
- 24/05/2004
- 08:25:32
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Well, at my school we have a "Tennage Issues" tent at our school every 2 weeks orso. This tent distributed free condoms, lubricant and information as well as advice and experts to talk to. I find this approach both educational and helpful. Everyone who is informed is at less risk. Good points made:)
- 24/05/2004
- 07:43:14
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Ok, my comment didnt really critisize the movie as i wanted 2 :p he he. I agree with you about the young actresses, but i think it was a good strating point. You did i good job of showing both good and bad.
- 24/05/2004
- 04:07:19
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This is awesome! i have seen this movie as well and i found it very moving and with great cinamatography! Great review and i agree with your comments:)
- 24/05/2004
- 04:04:10
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I meant that this comment : "When someone can be responsible for killing thousands of people, that person should be killed. " is NOT on!!!!!!!!!
- 23/05/2004
- 10:14:59
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look, i agree. You have made a very passionate piece, however, it isimportant to back up all your claims with solid evidence. Remember that an essay is personal opinion, so present the data that supports it. however, statements sush as:"When someone can be responsible for killing thousands of people, that person should be killed." are not on. This is leaning towrds propoganda mate. not too bad though:)
- 23/05/2004
- 10:13:26
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Well done, but remember that a book report should also include at least a little opinion! Other than summarising the story,what did you find the underlying message?etc.well done:)
- 23/05/2004
- 01:41:11
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I think this is a good piece, however, you do not have to state "my opinion is...." at the end of this piece, as an essay is meant to be putting forward opinion. You should convince the reader of your opinion!Still, well done
- 23/05/2004
- 01:35:00
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This is a good beginning to a further analysis, however, i felt you could go into more anaylisis of human corruption portrayed."Absolute power corrupts absolutely" etc. Still, a well written piece.
- 23/05/2004
- 01:28:37
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This is a very insightful piece. I think you have depicted the Machiavellian view flawlessly. You could also mention Maslow and his proposals for human values as a basis for Maslow's hierarchy of needs. A great essay!
- 23/05/2004
- 01:20:33
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But for 10th grade this is good:)congratulations:)
- 20/05/2004
- 21:41:30
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Very well argued essay:)Just one small constructive criticism: try not to change tense too much: eg:"stated that she is not putting herself for attention and is not thinking of taking over the jobs of men" maybe you could say:stated that "she WAS not", not "IS not"other than that - very insightful:)
- 20/05/2004
- 21:39:57
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You know what? i thought the introduction didnt take away any from the text. original idea and individual style:)great job again mate:)
- 20/05/2004
- 21:16:36
- Score: 39 out of 47 people found this comment useful.
Nice work again mate:)I found you put maximum power in minimum words and that is an ability we all should aspite to! :)
- 20/05/2004
- 21:07:49
- Score: 39 out of 48 people found this comment useful.
What can i say? I Think that everyone else's comments pretty much sum it up. Great work, in every aspect! Congratulations
- 20/05/2004
- 03:03:02
- Score: 12 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
I just thought i'd comment on the structure of this essay. I found that whilst it is informative in some respects, it is very hard to follow, shows little depth of comrehension and shows a lack of understandingparticularly in the introduction and conclusion. I understant that this is and 8th grade essay, and therefore, i think it prevalent to recieve constructive feedback.
- 19/05/2004
- 07:29:10
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.