The case study in itself is good and interesting but the structure and language need imporvement, praticularly your grammar and vocabulary.
- 10/10/2005
- 04:08:10
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I'm really pleased with your essay. It can help me so much in my business assessment. It's not too difficult to understand either.
- 10/10/2005
- 03:35:06
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
This isnt really an essay - its more like a business report but to rate it as a report, it is very good and i like the consistent use of headings all throughout it.
- 31/08/2005
- 06:39:40
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
A good essay and to the point, but a lot more information could have been included to add more detail.
- 31/08/2005
- 06:37:32
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Although this is a bit too short for a real essay, it is quite detailed and strong. I'm also glad you put some osrt of statistics into it.
- 31/08/2005
- 06:35:28
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
i really enjoyed reading your essay, which is something rare for me. it flowed with the structure of an essay, but was more like a recount of your experiences. good work..but i wouldnt be complaining about public transport if i were you because its nothing compared to the poor service of public transport here in australia. its extrmely unreliable and crowded and ALWAYS LATE, particularly trains
- 19/08/2005
- 03:24:03
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
very well researched and analysed.
- 09/08/2005
- 06:10:09
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
i really enjoyed reading your essay. i noe a lot of people that could get something out of reading it - people need ot be more aware that piracy is breaking the law
- 08/08/2005
- 07:27:40
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
you argued and proved your points really well..wow...i didnt know there was so much to dracula
- 06/08/2005
- 02:42:25
- Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
your structure was good and i liked how you added your own opinion about the matter. we're studying the deaths in custody matter in class right now and i learnt some new stuff from your essay
- 06/08/2005
- 01:25:56
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
although i dont agree with your point of view, you've done a excellent job of getting your point across, although i agree with aliblablah, you could have added some quotes and statistics.
- 02/08/2005
- 09:51:13
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
i think you could have made your points a whole heap stronger, but it was a good essay overall.
- 01/08/2005
- 05:39:45
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
interetsing topic and well written wth perfect structure. good work
- 29/07/2005
- 03:36:42
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
could be an interesting essay but i couldnt finish it due to the facts that there were no paragraphs in it, so it looked like just one big block of information which isnt very appealing to a reader.
- 29/07/2005
- 03:35:02
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
good essay but you could have expanded a bit more on it.
- 29/07/2005
- 03:30:47
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
although i am against gay marriages,I am glad to see that you looked at both sides of the issue. However, there are much more stronger reasons why gay marriages should not be legalised which i believe you could have put in.
- 29/07/2005
- 03:29:36
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
i studies the whitlam dismissal in school last year but your essay made it much easier to understand in a briefer way the events leading up to his sacking and why and how it happened. good work
- 29/07/2005
- 03:26:53
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
A beautiful piece of work!! It's something one can read out to friends and family without boring them.
- 23/07/2005
- 00:13:13
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
Even though we don't have this problem down here in australia, it was very interesting to read your essay and observe the problems you guys have in the US.Your point was very strongly argued and your structure was perfect.
- 20/07/2005
- 07:14:51
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
i really loved all the character decriptions. very helpful to someone who has never watched the show and wants to begin.
- 20/07/2005
- 07:10:03
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
I am very pleased with your essay, it is of very high quality. However, I think you could of cut it down a fair bit -5000 something words does seem a bit much for a year 10 essay
- 10/07/2005
- 23:01:35
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Your essay makes complete sense and should be shown to all pro-lifers so they take more of a stand againts this cruel killing of unborn babies disguised by the simple word 'abortion'. Good job!!
- 27/06/2005
- 07:11:50
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Although I see where you're coming from, you could have argued your point of view much more strongly and worked on your essay structure.Sometimes doctors say that a patient has no chance whatsoever of surviving or getting better, and in the end, the patient lives for much longer than expected and sometimes even gets better. There have been many cases where this has happened. And what are the chances of patients making written notes made in assistance of a lawyer? i honestly doubt the average person would go to a lawyer and get a note made out just in case somethig happens to them.
- 27/06/2005
- 06:41:29
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
i thought ur essay was supposed to discuss both sides of the debate. i found it to be very subjective and one-sided, all it did was rebutt what the church says, not rebutt what homosexuals say.
- 14/06/2005
- 03:43:38
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
You argue your point of view strongly and it is very persuasive. I also agree with you on your stand.
- 26/05/2005
- 04:18:42
- Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
i really liked your essay, especially how all the events were in perfect chronological order. The recaps towards the end are rather interesting.
- 10/05/2005
- 06:06:11
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
although you raised some good points, you need to give examples to back up what you're saying. As a whole, you could have done better.
- 10/05/2005
- 05:49:43
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
The quality of your essay comes straight through. I can see that a lot of research has gone into this, and you have structured it very well, particularly by making sure everything was in chronological order.
- 03/05/2005
- 07:17:28
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I thought this was a very good essay. Not only was it interesting and very informative, but I belive it could be useful to me in the future as I am a yr 11 legal studies student and we have only begun ot touch upon the above topics in class. Your essay is what I liek to read - it doesn't bore a person and can also be used as related material and a source of information. Good work
- 03/05/2005
- 07:02:54
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.