you also spelt chronicles wrong. (chronicals)
- 13/06/2004
- 12:13:10
- Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
It's a good story but I would like to hear what happens to Lance.PS. you spelt 'Angel' wrong throughout the whole story. (angle)
- 13/06/2004
- 12:10:54
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
love it!
- 13/06/2004
- 11:11:31
- Score: 14 out of 26 people found this comment useful.
What is your point of view exactly?
- 13/06/2004
- 11:07:40
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Your grammer and punctuation are ok but I think you need to work on the parts where people are speaking.The nailfile falling into Simon's head was not very plausible and I feel it could've been explained better.You explained everything good in the start but towards the end it sort of felt like you were trying to hurry up and finish.
- 13/06/2004
- 10:59:54
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
it's ok but is it a creative story or an investigation on NAVY SEALS.
- 13/06/2004
- 10:43:29
- Score: 8 out of 10 people found this comment useful.