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  • Very brief but to the point

    Its really good. It's got all the basis for a more profound research. It's helped me a lot toknow where to look for language theorists. Good job!
    • 16/10/2004
    • 12:53:13
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Frankenstein/great expectations

    very good introduction, strong and coherent, when contrasting something it should usually be in the same paragraph (usually), you mantain your argument throughout the essay making it a very consistent piece of work, yoou have very good arguments and excellent illustrations that strengthen them, appropriate use of quotations both in quality and quantity, when you have the short paragraph about repressed desires you say that Frankenstein is in this way similar to great expectations but you do not explain why, excellent conclusion. Well done! :)
    • 25/06/2004
    • 16:17:58
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Existencialist: the stranger

    Great essay, You truly tease out the existencialist aspects of the novel. You have not used many quotes fromthe text however you transmit the message very well. the intro is short but good but the conclusion seems a bit feeble, however, Well done.
    • 24/06/2004
    • 15:04:06
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Homeostasis

    Waow, i'm impressed. this sounds like a very interesting experiment. The write up is very well set out clear and coherent. However you might want to explain what homeostasis is straight away first so that readers who do not know what homeostasis is might grasp it faster. I'm sure a lot of people will find this very useful especially if they're doing the IB and need an iea for a Group 4 project.Well done!
    • 23/06/2004
    • 13:21:28
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Suspense

    a few spelling mistakes but its a good story. i kind of expected it to be a hide and seek game but then it did seem plausible that he might have gone a bit psycho with such a close relationship with his sister. good job! :)
    • 23/06/2004
    • 09:01:54
    • Score: 10 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Part 10

    wow, that threw a rock in my stomach! You did it to piss me off! ;) I didnt want charlie to die ! Charlie was kick ass! Keep writing man, you've got talent!
    • 23/06/2004
    • 08:35:00
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Creative writing

    well, i don't think that chirp is the right word for seagulls but it may be a matter of opinion. Its quite short unfortunately but it's a good piece of descriptive work, i wouldn't say excellent but acceptable.
    • 18/06/2004
    • 05:10:22
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • A bit confusing

    Hey, Well i think its getting confusing. you started using 'I' for Charly and that made it confusing at first because i thought you were talking about the main character. And i don't understand how you said they'de be rescued in 24hours and then you say five hours. Its a great follow up though once you get over that. TELL ME MORE!
    • 18/06/2004
    • 05:05:47
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "Porphyria's Lover"

    clear introduction, very well structured and organised. unfortunately you have no conclusion and as i do not have any knowledge of the text i dont know if u've left anything out. But i reckon its pretty good. on a scale of 0-10 i'd risk an 8
    • 17/06/2004
    • 06:34:48
    • Score: 27 out of 45 people found this comment useful.
  • Great!

    Well what can i say that i havent said before, it just gets better. the attention to detail gives it exceptional reality (peroxide) can't wait for part 9
    • 17/06/2004
    • 06:22:55
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done

    Excellent essay, A lot of effort and research has been put in it. It is interesting and well structured and delivers the message appropriately.
    • 17/06/2004
    • 05:08:25
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Comment

    very well written and structured essay. It wasn't what i was looking for but i kept reading out of interest. An introduction would have helped me to grasp the essay as a whole straight from the start however it's some pretty elaborate piece of work. well done!
    • 17/06/2004
    • 04:58:13
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Keep going

    THANK YOU FOR NOT KILLING CHARLIE! ok she's paralysed but they're bound to have some kind of technology to cure that no? like.. plz!! I hate you for making me an addict to ur story! ;) I'm looking forward to part 8!
    • 16/06/2004
    • 12:55:30
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Part 4

    Im completely taken in! as the story develops it gets more and more interesting you stop at the right moments and reveal credible information.
    • 16/06/2004
    • 04:18:59
    • Score: 5 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Part 3

    great come back i feel its getting better as i read on. the way you add realism to the characters is to add little details to their taste in clothes and music. it gives an insight on their personality.
    • 16/06/2004
    • 04:10:12
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Part 2

    well, its good but there are a lot of people dying in ur story\\\\\\\; his mom, his girlfriend, charlie-s dad. thats a lot of "accidental deaths in 2 parts" but i like the way its developing, ts got depth
    • 16/06/2004
    • 04:03:56
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Part 1

    i thought it was good, there's only one little thing that kind of doesnt seem realistic: people are being slaughtered and the response is "oh dear dear lets tell captain tomorrow when none of them are left." apart from that im really captivated and looking forward to part 2 :)
    • 16/06/2004
    • 03:55:30
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Ps

    Thinking back on what i said i thing your ending is fine but a brief summary at the beginning of the essay may have made it easier to follow with an overview.thx ;)
    • 15/06/2004
    • 13:59:49
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Structural Biology

    I found it very interesting. very good development of facts although an introduction wouldn't hurt (to sumarise) and maybe a more finalised ending/conclusion. However on the whole im sure you got a very good grade on it. on a scale of 0-10 i'd gice you 9
    • 15/06/2004
    • 13:50:05
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Anthem for doomed youth

    I have a few comments on your essay:Fist your information is good and you seem toi have forgotten no details. However, your essay lacks structure (no introduction or conclusion) and the facts seem to have been thrown in rather randomly. There is a bit too much repetition in the first few paragraphs. Inmy opinion you are malingering too long n one aspect of the poem. On a rating of 0-10 (which seems fairer than 0-2) i would give you a low 7. I feel it is a great source of information to write an essay but not a very good final draft.
    • 15/06/2004
    • 13:32:15
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.