The title needs to be worked on. The title make you think that it will be a biography of Charles Darwin. A better title would have been "Darwins Theory of Evolution"
- 01/07/2004
- 03:37:38
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The story had no point but it still entertained me for a few seconds
- 30/06/2004
- 19:16:02
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
You could have explained the symbolism better then that the women supported the corpes, what did that actualy sumbolise? At the start of this essay you said the dead man symbolised the auther and then you said he symbolised beauty, apart from that it was not so bad. But dont say "dude" in an essay.
- 30/06/2004
- 18:51:10
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You are changing from a formal essay to informal eg:"I am not saying that it would completely disappear", "I feel that we can't continue" etc.Otherwise a good essay
- 28/06/2004
- 08:49:50
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The title was too vague. Cartesion Mythology could be anything not just a story about Descartes.
- 28/06/2004
- 08:20:33
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I think for a summery you go into too much detail
- 28/06/2004
- 08:16:16
- Score: 3 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Greast essay but it would have been good if you mentioned the link between Squealer and the Pravda which stalin used to keep the people under control by feeding them propaganda, the way Napoleon used Squealer
- 28/06/2004
- 07:54:06
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.