User Details For: Tawny_Rookwood

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  • What?

    "Wicca as it is a Religion can lead to infertility, as it is a gift given to Satan. Teenagers think that Wicca's 'cool' but you don't get something for nothing, each time a spell is cast, you lose something and Satan gains it, each time he performs a spell he losses nothing but gains followers. Just remember that when you call upon these evil beings, you are calling on the powers of Satan."Where did you get that information? Wiccans don't call upon Satan, in fact, the vast majority of them don't believe in Satan, as it is something from the Christian religion and not Wiccanism. Also, I've never heard of people calling themselves a "Wicca", they usually call themselves a "Wiccan" or a "Witch."
    • 10/08/2004
    • 14:44:56
    • Score: 12 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
  • You're in 11th Grade?

    The story was very creative and quite funny, but the writing was atrocious! You really need to work on your spelling/grammar.
    • 10/08/2004
    • 14:05:33
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Defense isn't spelled with a C

    I thought that your paper was pretty good, but the title was kind of misleading. Perhaps it should have been called Medieval Castles, because that's really your focus.Also, you don't want to keep using the same word to describe something, like when you say "The walls were very thick, anywhere between 8 and 20 feet in thickness", it would be better if you had said, "The walls were very thick, anywhere between 8 and 20 feet in width."
    • 06/08/2004
    • 12:53:36
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmm...

    Eh, it's okay but not great. At the moment, you really don't have any fully developed characters; no one even has a name! You just need to be a bit more descriptive of how people felt, who the kids were, etc.
    • 04/08/2004
    • 17:15:07
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Er... no

    Sorry, but this doesn't belong in the Creative Writing section, as there is almost nothing creative about it. If there were a section for Daydreams and Random Natterings, then yes, this would fit in quite well.Not only does this "essay" tell rather than show (the last thing you want in a story), but there's no conflict! You just miraculously get everything you want. The only reason this gets a :| instead of a :( is because the movie you wrote had a good message
    • 04/08/2004
    • 17:01:42
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Huh?

    Kind of depressing, yet kind of inspirational... but what exactly is this supposed to be about?
    • 04/08/2004
    • 16:41:26
    • Score: 16 out of 19 people found this comment useful.