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  • Interesting points

    I enjoyed reading your essay. I have read the piece by Plath and like it, so it was interesting to hear your interpretation. Like many essays posted on here, edit it! Also, you may want to shorten some of your paragraphs, but other than that, its great.
    • 20/10/2004
    • 21:16:26
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  • Edit?

    This paper should be edited. Try different transitions rather than "1st," or "2nd." Also, use a more rivetting hook or grabber and conclusion.
    • 20/10/2004
    • 21:11:58
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  • Satisfying...

    This paper is very satisfying. All the major points are touched on well, with a good amount of detail. I would've liked to see a works cited, but awesome job!
    • 20/10/2004
    • 21:08:22
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  • Nice works cited!

    Its nice to see a paper with a works cited. But is this APA or MLA? Would be a good thing to make clear. But nice job writing the paper. You are compassionate about the topic and that is well conveyed.
    • 19/10/2004
    • 21:54:22
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  • Works Cited

    It would be helpful to include a works cited page. Here are some applicable sources in MLA format:Works CitedBottle Biology. University of Wisconsin-Madison 10 October 2004. 17 September 2004 <Tab/><http://www.bottlebiology.org/investigations/terraqua_explore.html>Fence, Franky. "Road safe of environment safe?" CNN 10 October 2004. 25 June 2004 <Tab/><www.cnn.com>Gallagher, Daniel. "Effects of Road De-icing Salts on Groundwater Systems." Virginia <Tab/>Polytechnic Institute and State University 10 October 2004. November 2003 <Tab/><http://www.ce.vt.edu/program_areas/environmental/teach/gwprimer/roadsalt/roa<Tab/>dsalt.html>Keller, Janet. Salt Institute 10 October 2004. 3 March 2002 <Tab/><http://www.saltinstitute.org/30.html>Roberson, Todd. "Pollution." 10 October 2004. 15 August 2003 <Tab/><http://www.protectingwater.com/>
    • 19/10/2004
    • 21:46:08
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