\"a independent\" needs to be an independent other then that all in all OK. So sentences were a little rocky. Loved your ideas I just think it was hard for you to get them onto paper as well as they were in your head but like i said all in all alright
- 26/10/2004
- 22:31:47
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Nicely written a little dry though but most world literature is so what ya gonna do...am I right. Well anyway bravo keep it up oo ya and stay in school lol
- 26/10/2004
- 22:26:17
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Kept my attention (which is hard to do in most cases) and very well written.
- 26/10/2004
- 22:22:40
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Very well written (can't say that I TOTALLY agree with your thoughts though).
- 26/10/2004
- 22:19:54
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I learned in Com. last year that using repetition is sometimes very using full inadvertising but YOU'RE NOT SELLING ANYTHING so don't use it so much lol. Good info though.
- 26/10/2004
- 22:17:21
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First thing I have seen written by someone my age. If only my teachers graded as easily as yours. I am LD and have a terrible time of making sure not to run-on. Which then makes my sentences a little choppy when put in punctuation. I don't know if you have the same problem but you need more complex sentences.
- 26/10/2004
- 22:08:13
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You don't seem to get your thoughts across well. I think you did a little to much research, had so much info that you tryed to get it all out WAY to fast...but what am I to judge im just an 8th grader.
- 26/10/2004
- 22:03:10
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.