I feel you gave significant points in various types of communication. Nice Work
- 22/11/2004
- 07:03:09
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Nice content it was interesting to read and I feel you did a good job in pointing out values relating to education. Also, pointing out the "norms" and romantic influences really put eveything into perspective. Nice Work! Pretty good grammer too. WOW! The only thing that I feel is missing would be how parents may or may not influence youths as well as possible role models. I think you did very well.
- 22/11/2004
- 06:45:29
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Your paper had a great starting pointed and flowed well until near the end. Plenty of examples of negative perceptions of intelligence were given but it lacked comparison examples of positive intelligence or perceptions of. Otherwis, I think it's interesting to read and fitting for the grade level it was written on.
- 22/11/2004
- 06:36:31
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I feel you did a great job in persuasion by making reference to the ad portraying "ugly" people. I am curious about where you came up with the specific age of 15 years for adolescents in relation to sex as a major topic. With the exception of this and some grammer errors this is a nice example of persuasive writing.
- 22/11/2004
- 06:26:57
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Thank you for your thoughts on my essay. I am always welcome to suggestions on improving my work. However, the intention of this paticular essay was to illustrate personal experience in relation to how others percieve a teenager facing motherhood. I included statistics to highlight facts relating to both the mother and children born to teen girls.
- 22/11/2004
- 06:13:12
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Absolutely great content! Aside from some grammatical errors you wrote an excellent essay. Content flowed together and the use of statistics to back up your statements really set off the information stated. You may consider correcting some minor grammer errors but otherwise I wouldn't recommend changing any of your content. GREAT JOB very well written!
- 22/11/2004
- 06:00:43
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.