A business plan is most often presented to potential investors and should defend why this project is indeed a good investment. Therefor you must be most formal. Phrases like "that type of thing" are not acceptable (try stating more examples and then use "etc.").I realise this is not a by-the-book business plan, but even so, the author could benefit from having a look at other formal business plans.
- 13/03/2003
- 05:36:16
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I rarely comment on the essays here (ok, not THAT rarely), but this one really stands out to me.Besides the fact, that the author writes clearly, correctly and in a well-structured manner, he also brings out many great points. The structure of the essay is a bit interesting, as it seems to break the intro, main, conclusion mold, but without losing the reader.One thing I might want in the essay, is some actual personal experiences. The author says that he knows from experience this or that, but I think description these experiences could add to the essay, rather than over-personalising it. An alternative might be to interview people who are part of online communities.Another book on this topic is reviewed here:http://books.slashdot.org/article.pl?sid=01/11/27/167256&mode=nested&tid=95"Design for Community" by Powazek.
- 05/09/2002
- 10:58:28
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
Note that some of the links will only work if you remove the suffix ".link" where it appears
- 26/05/2002
- 10:01:15
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I really enjoyed reading this essay, as Clockwork Orange is an all-time classic for me. If you are to use this essay, you might want to a bit careful about the Freud references, as he is more and more frequently criticized. Besides that: excellent.
- 26/05/2002
- 09:56:15
- Score: 8 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
À maybe better analogy than the reef one, is the quote of Newton: "If I managed to look further, it is because I was standing on the shoulders of giants". Beautiful, no?
- 30/04/2002
- 12:20:17
- Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
There is a beautiful quote by Oppenheimer, which he said on TV after realising what he had helped create: "I am become Death - destroyer of worlds". It is from the Baghavat Ghita.This essay seriously lacks sources, quotes or anything actually supporting the arguments presented.
- 22/04/2002
- 11:30:38
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
I had never heard of this story before, so I found the essay very interesting. However, it definatly needs sources.You can see the Kennedy family tree here: http://marthamoxley.com/kennedytree.htm
- 18/04/2002
- 12:23:12
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
can be found here: http://www.madd.org
- 12/04/2002
- 18:17:29
- Score: 10 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
"'!@#$^&*()_æøå;:_-
- 05/04/2002
- 08:40:17
- Score: 3 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
Remember there can be a fine line between patrionism & nationalism, and sometimes (especially in the States) it can be hard to tell the difference. I think this is an important point.
- 05/04/2002
- 06:55:58
- Score: 13 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
Note that the author seems to confuse racism with discrimination.
- 05/04/2002
- 06:18:31
- Score: 9 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
I liked the essay and it reminded me of a Kubrick quote, which I'm could come in handy to the reader working on a 2001 essay.Kubrick was asked: "What is 2001 about?"and he replied: "It is an attempt of the ignorant to explain the inexplicable."
- 24/03/2002
- 08:23:42
- Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
Notice that France has converted to the Euro currency since this essay was written.
- 07/03/2002
- 03:55:00
- Score: 13 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
In case you were wondering.so·lil·o·quyn., pl. -quies.A dramatic or literary form of discourse in which a character talks to himself or herself or reveals his or her thoughts without addressing a listener.A specific speech or piece of writing in this form of discourse.The act of speaking to oneself.
- 02/02/2002
- 14:52:44
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
At this site there are a bunch of qoutes of Ted Bundyhttp://serial-killers.virtualave.net/bundy.htm
- 01/02/2002
- 09:01:55
- Score: 14 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
There are a lot of bold claims in this essay, which Im sure a lot of teachers will come down on real hard, if you dont have the sources to back them up. Try www.smokedot.org for links to sources.
- 22/01/2002
- 10:20:16
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
yada
- 17/01/2002
- 09:40:30
- Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
The Trojan war did NOT take place around the 13th century. Try something aroudn 2000 years BC. Geez.
- 07/12/2001
- 12:13:06
- Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
This essay may be ok at Christian college, but in terms of "Art and the Bible", it has very little to offer. Where are the quotes? References? Are we talking about Art or Music? If both, change the title.
- 26/11/2001
- 11:00:44
- Score: 11 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
"La Japonaise"http://www.art-beat-gallery.net/monet-image/Monet-large/Monet-LaJaponaise.jpg"The Portal of Rouen Cathedral in Morning Light" (note: this is the correct name of the painting!)http://www.getty.edu/art/collections/objects/o142049.html
- 26/11/2001
- 08:44:17
- Score: 10 out of 12 people found this comment useful.