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    This story lacks merit, and is too short. This evidence leads the reader to the following conclusion: the author should attempt to independently improve his writing skills. This goal can eventually be achieved through extra work created by him, for him (i.e. not for extra marks), and on his own time.
    • 06/08/2002
    • 19:31:44
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
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    Excellent essay; however, in an essay, one should avoid the usage of personal reference at all times. Therefore, when you said "Everyday, I go home and check my e-mail," you should have attempted to re-word it to avoid the personal reference. The following is an example: "Everyday after school, the average child checks his or her e-mail."
    • 06/08/2002
    • 19:23:39
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
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    This essay was of good quality; however, it was lacking in quantity of information. Otherwise, this was an excellent paper.
    • 06/08/2002
    • 19:19:53
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
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    This essay was a decent effort. The one error that I will address is the usage of numerals. In an English essay, you should attempt to use words at every possible opportunity. Therefore, 78% should become "seventy-eight percent."
    • 06/08/2002
    • 19:15:31
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This essay was decent, but not excellent. Contraction errors are one of the few mistakes within this work (eg. "doesn't" should be "does not"). Keep up the effort, and your writing skills will undoubtedly improve.
    • 06/08/2002
    • 19:03:22
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This essay was masterfully presented. Continue to adhere to high standards of excellence within the English language, and you will be richly rewarded.
    • 06/08/2002
    • 18:58:11
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
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    This was not exactly an essay; however, I found it informative all the same. You made the basic workings of A.I. clear enough for most English-speaking individuals to fully, or partially, understand the topic.
    • 06/07/2002
    • 23:17:29
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    Your adoration of these performers is highly apparent; however, your delivery suggests that personal bias hindered your goal of creating a quality paper. Additionally, for such a short work, you seemed to use quite a few words repeatedly (such as "screaming"). Overemphasis can be crippling. This essay also demostrated a shaky grasp of grammar conventions on your part. I do not believe this work justifies the time expended, but you made it clear that you are capable of producing essays of higher caliber. Through genuine effort, you will succeed.-Taimanov
    • 06/07/2002
    • 23:09:02
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Comment

    I gave you a smilie for this essay, as it is clearly produced by a high-caliber writer. Continue to adhere to standards of excellence, and you will go far in life.
    • 20/06/2002
    • 14:05:00
    • Score: 13 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This essay strated your interest in the subject; however, your writing was poor. To begin, your introductory paragraph did not effectively convey what your essay was about. Additionally, it contained superfluous personal references. Not to mention the spelling mistake ("mindes" should be "minds"), and the contraction error ("I'm" should be "I am"). The contraction error notably coincides with the error of making personal references. The second paragraph also contained superfluous personal references; however, I am more consider with your usage of the question mark. You stated, "I wanted to find out how Albert Einstein's intelligence helped develop nuclear weapons?," which is a statement. This having been said, the question mark should be replaced with a period. If you want to keep the question mark, then rephrase the statement (eg. "It is my intention to discover the answer to the following question: How did Albert Einstein's sagacity assist in the development of nuclear weapons?"). In your third paragraph, you mentioned Einstein's first real friend (Max Talmey); however, the sentence you used: "Albert Einstein's first real friend came when he tried to save a baby stork; Max Talmey helped him," does not clearly identify Max Talmey as this friend. Additionally, in this paragraph, "in the company of Einstein and his wife," sounds slightly better than, "with the Einstein's."Your fourth paragraph was not great, but I feel it was good enough to avoid touching on. In the fifth paragraph, a paragraph should come after "infant." Also, the reader has already been told that Munich is in Germany, so try to avoid using "Germany" twice in this paragraph, as it is simply superfluous. "Didn't" is another contraction error; it should be "did not." Finally, you should have placed a comma after "Jews." There is a great deal more corrections to be pointed out; however, my hands are aching, so I will leave the rest of the work to other individuals. I leave you with this: "Never stop making attempts to broaden your literary progress, as such a discontinuation can prove dismal in the end."
    • 08/06/2002
    • 22:31:45
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This essay was effective and well-written; however, personal bias impeded the message. Additionally, there are three theories in psychology: you are born blank and your surrounding environment shapes you, or you are born predetermined, the third simply being the middleground. Your essay seemed to acknowledge the first theory as being a well-known truth , without providing any reference to the other theories. This fact suggests that you were unaware of the existence of other theories, or that you simply chose to disregard them in the hopes that ignorance would not come to bear. Other than this one key issue, I thought the essay was pretty good.
    • 08/06/2002
    • 14:50:44
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This is a great start; however, it can use some work. For one, it contains many grammatical errors, which impedes your message. Additionally, some word choices are undesirable (eg. "qualities qualify"). Try utilizing words that are not so similar in spelling, as this will place further emphasis on your skills, especially those in the realm of writing.
    • 08/06/2002
    • 13:44:26
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This essay was excellent; however, I will make one suggestion for improvement. Why not compare Death of a Salesman with another Stratford-quality play, at least for a portion of the essay?
    • 08/06/2002
    • 13:37:32
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Comment

    This essay expressed your great appreciation for the subject in question; however, a few mistakes were apparent. Of note, you digressed at the end by stating a superfluous opinion.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 23:00:36
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    Your appreciation of Bruce Lee is evident; however, you hardly did him justice in this essay. Your choice of wording was degrading in some cases (ie. "stuff"). In addition, personal opinions / bias should not be presented with personal inferences affixed to them.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 22:57:05
    • Score: 9 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
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    I believe you made a sincere attempt to present a balanced report on facts and opinions. Your efforts were apparent; however, your choice of wording was terrible in some cases. Additionally, personal bias was evident, which greatly reduced the quality of your work.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 22:52:24
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    A decent attempt to convey ideas and facts surrounding the Titanic; however, personal bias was noted. In addition, your desciptions of the Titanic contained superfluous adjectives.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 22:42:23
    • Score: 6 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This essay was an excellent effort. You strated a thorough understanding / appreciation for the topic; however, you could have enhanced this work by suggesting logical paths to take in an effort to increase literacy internationally / multilingually.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 22:39:38
    • Score: 5 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
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    This essay was a justifiable work; however, digression became apparent when you mentioned Columbus, which removed emphasis from the subject you had chosen to discuss.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 22:35:32
    • Score: 12 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This essay was decent; however, the comparison was not a great choice: actual authority vs. fictional authority. This essay would have been much more useful if you had compared two existent governments (ie. US government vs. Canadian government).
    • 07/06/2002
    • 22:31:48
    • Score: 5 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This essay was a weak attempt. The thesis was never clearly answered, and personal bias greatly decreased the material value of this work. You generated ideas that attested to your mediocre handle on the topic at hand; however, these ideas suggested that you are capable of producing work of much higher quality. Unfortunately, you must take long strides before I can consider your work to be of merit.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 22:23:14
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    Einstein was a treasured gift to the world's scientific community. The length of your essay did not do him justice, suggesting that you hold this individual in low regard. Despite personal taste, you should still strate a strong understanding / appreciation for the individual you choose to address in your essay. This writing attempt was undesirable, but I believe you will produce an essay of higher quality next time.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 22:15:34
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This essay was strong, and presented the writer's disposition toward the issue; however, it appeared to contain too many opinions, with too little supporting evidence / facts.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 22:08:21
    • Score: 8 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    I enjoyed this essay; however, I believe a lot more information on the location could have been provided. For example, regional dialects with background information. Additionally, historical significance of the location, and how this trip affected you would have been welcomed.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 22:05:17
    • Score: 21 out of 24 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This essay provided an informative view on the issue addressed; however, a common thread between the companies and a history of their progress would have enhanced the quality of your work.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 21:59:19
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    Your essay was decent; however, it left much to be desired. You could begin by finding common threads that strongly link the theories together, and providing some information on how the discovery was made along with scientific / mathematical reasoning. In addition, your conclusion left the whole topic open; whereas, it should have summed up your essay, without leaving questions about the topic itself hanging there. Though it should produce a desire to learn more about the topic within the reader, it should not leave questions that hold no merit (ie. how close are they to discovery?).
    • 07/06/2002
    • 21:26:03
    • Score: 5 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    Your mimicry of Poe was excellent; however, it does not promote individualism. Instead of attempting to mirror a writer's style, why not devise an original stlye of writing?
    • 07/06/2002
    • 21:19:34
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
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    The essay was ok, but it did not flow. Some word choices impeded the message. Of note, avoid the usage of the word "things" in an essay. Sometimes, "objects" can replace "things," but there are many other replacements. This was a decent attempt; however, I believe you can make vast improvements in your works.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 21:15:30
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    This essay does not do the topic justice. The length of your essay itself, suggests that little effort was afforded to this work. You clearly raised thought-provoking ideas; however, the essay would be vastly improved if you went into <i>at least</i> one more paragraph worth of detail.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 21:09:17
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    Your essay effectively supported your thesis; however, details were missing. Perhaps you could add more details pertaining to the events you laid out in the essay? I wish you further improvement as you continue in your efforts to produce enviable literary works.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 21:04:57
    • Score: 23 out of 24 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    Judging by this essay, your acceptance into these institutions was fully deserved; however, I would rather apply to places of higher education with original writings, not others. It is noble of you to offer, but it does not promote what higher education stands for.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 21:00:49
    • Score: 10 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
  • Informative

    You have provided a great deal of information on rock music in such a short essay; however, you made many unrequired personal references that took emphasis off the topic you were attempting to discuss. I would like to stress that this essay was worthwhile reading; therefore, it is not my intention to cut you up.
    • 07/06/2002
    • 20:56:34
    • Score: 10 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • My opinion

    This essay is one of the best I have come across on this website so far. The subjects in question were unknown to me previously, but through this carefully presented essay, I have learned a great deal. Your essay has enlightened and inspired me, for which I thank you.
    • 01/06/2002
    • 18:58:44
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Newton

    I enjoyed the essay. It provided a brief glimpse into the life and works of Newton; however, a few grammatical errors were present, which slightly affected my appreciation of the work.
    • 31/05/2002
    • 23:56:00
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.