As a current servicemember and war veteran, I found this essay to be very moving and heartfelt. I can understand why the author would have had a hard time reciting this essay in class. The author chose well from all the memorable quotes available form WWII. I also noticed that the author cited works but did not list them at the end of the essay. I wish I could have written as well when I was in 9th grade. I look forward to reading more excellent essays from this author.
- 20/06/2002
- 07:00:07
- Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
Well written and not overly technical. Provides a good introduction of cancer and it's causes. Would have been better if it had listed some references. Keep up the good work.
- 11/06/2002
- 07:48:03
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Well written and easy to follow. This essay kept my undivided attention. Definately a grade "A" paper.
- 06/06/2002
- 08:23:51
- Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This would be a much better essay if the writer used a good introduction and then summarized what the reader was supposed to get out of all the facts listed. Use basic format to aid reader in folowing ideas. Intro-transitions-Conclusion
- 06/06/2002
- 08:07:39
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This essay is too short for the topic. I felt that this essay was more of an attack on Erikson. I guess the writer felt her territory was invaded by him. Need more substance to tie in with her opinions.
- 06/06/2002
- 07:58:19
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.