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  • Very good

    This essay is very well written. I'm not sure I agree with everything within it, but the argument is sure convincing. Another item you could have touched upon is the violence in video games.
    • 11/12/2004
    • 19:58:44
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Contradictions

    This essay seems to contradict itself. "This is the exact reason why I feel that abortion should be legal" and "These videos show that the fetuses are very much as human as you and I. " don't go well together. The point isn't clear. "abortion rights should be protected" and "have an anonymous adoption ... saving the life of someone just like you." just don't fit. I suggest you revise this, lexiibaby01; pick a side and stay with it.
    • 10/12/2004
    • 21:16:34
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • What is this?!?!

    I don't know where flamewheel95's been, but that was horrible! Arthur Dent doesn't sound anything like that! When Earth was destroyed, Arthur just finished 3 pints by himself. Not to mention the disortion of being in space, he sure wasn't thinking, "I lost a lot of well known people and lost family." He didn't have any close friends. Ford was a friend, but Arthur saw him as annoying before his space adventures. "Ya. Sure. Sounds great to me." Arthur would never say "Ya." This essay isn't well written, either. "It was a lot simpler to live than to live in space." Well flamewheel95, at least you got the names right.
    • 10/12/2004
    • 18:50:52
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • What?

    "The democrats have nearly devised the way to make America a better nation." What? If this statement were true, everyone would vote Democrat. Your sentence, "The Democrats are one of the oldest political parties today" is not clear. They are an old party of the USA, originally called the Democratic-Republicans, but are no where near as old as, lets say, monarchies. I suggest revising your essay, including clearer facts, and maybe some Republican views to even out the essay. You could also put statistics in your essay, like how younger voters tend to vote Democrat, as older ones vote Republican.
    • 10/12/2004
    • 14:50:11
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • So beautiful, I could kiss you- but not really.

    Awesome essay! I congratulate you on this piece of art. I agree with everything you said, and I can appreciate the fact that you had to agree with Bush on some points. Some things you could have added to make the paper stronger are his misuse of the fear of the American public to further his own political agenda, like the heinous USA PATRIOT Act, or his reply to the info that American soldiers were being attacked by Iraqi terrorists ("Bring it on.")
    • 09/12/2004
    • 20:06:09
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • You forgot something...

    Hey, I had to do this in my Chemistry class! F.Y.I., The alchohol precentage is pretty low if you use that method, but if you allow a vent by either leaving the cap loose or poking a small hole in the lid, the precentage multiplies. Consequently, the higher 'proof' rootbeer's taste is much worse than the already bad tasting original version.
    • 09/12/2004
    • 19:36:43
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Pretty good, but with sone English No-No's

    This essay is well written for the most part. "In Conclusion" is a big letdown for this paper, as it has few flaws up to this point. Switching between 1st person and 3rd person views interrupts the flow of the essay. Too many pronouns are also a problem. Otherwise, though, 'tis a well written essay, indeed. If you are interested in math. Or teaching.
    • 09/12/2004
    • 19:21:13
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Sorry, I forgot to include the URL to the ad.

    http://www.stanford.edu/class/linguist34/advertisements/alcohol%20ads/pages/06bandb_jpg.htm
    • 08/12/2004
    • 23:04:05
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.