I agree that when something is banned there is more of a thrill in doing it. You have a very good argument with actual facts to back it up. Though I don't believe smoking in general is good for you, I really don't see it as a health risk (at least not what our gov. makes it out to be) Nicely done.
- 26/01/2005
- 17:36:29
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Personally, I'm a big fan of Howard Stern. I really liked reading your essay, you used a lot of quotes and I can tell you did a ton of research. The ending wraps it up perfectly. Very impressed.
- 26/01/2005
- 17:25:36
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I really liked reading the story. My only problem is that it seems a bit short, maybe if you had gone into more detail. Other than that, awesome job. The yin-yang comes to mind when reading it.
- 26/01/2005
- 12:47:41
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Your essay seems really abrubt. It starts, you spit a lot of information out, and then it ends. It feels more like a summary than an essay. Sorry.
- 21/01/2005
- 18:36:22
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
A very in depth analysis of how people learn to live with one another, though they are different. It shows that you spent a lot of time on it.
- 21/01/2005
- 17:07:43
- Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I like how you did it though letters, it allows you to imagine what it's like from his point of view. Good Essay.
- 21/01/2005
- 17:02:54
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Really displays how marketing is really just another form of propaganda. I liked your analyzation of different ads, gives a different perspective to things.
- 21/01/2005
- 16:56:21
- Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
You have some run-on sentenced and your paragraphs are a bit long. Maybe if you broke them up into seperate thoughts.. other than that it's refreshing to hear an optomistic outlook on marriage.
- 21/01/2005
- 16:53:03
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
Your formatting is a bit strange. If you're going to do several different people like that, maybe you should break it up into different sections, titling each one. I'm also not sure about the questions you placed in the middle. Dedicate a paragraph to each one stating the it instead of asking it.
- 21/01/2005
- 07:45:22
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Make sure you site your quotes. Good points though.
- 21/01/2005
- 07:24:40
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I don't like the way its broken up into sections, especially the first paragraph is weird. make sure you site your quotes.
- 21/01/2005
- 07:23:19
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I disagree, in my eyes people are evil at heart. Have you not read Lord of the Flies, its the perfect example (even though I didn't like the book)
- 21/01/2005
- 07:20:38
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A subject i would never think to write about.. good analyzation though. You make some good points.
- 21/01/2005
- 07:14:37
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I wouldn't say that i would every consider being a nurse.. you do a good job though to point out the pros. Good essay
- 21/01/2005
- 07:11:52
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
The first sentence draws you in and you have a lot of evidence to back up your thoughts. I agree with you on this subject.
- 21/01/2005
- 07:08:00
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I really like the way you started of.. your essay also contains a lot of good info.
- 21/01/2005
- 07:05:57
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Nice thoughts, just try breaking up the really long paragraph and elaborate on each idea.
- 21/01/2005
- 07:04:04
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I like the way you include quotes, it backs up your thoughts.
- 21/01/2005
- 07:01:40
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I didn't know you could submit labs.. your setup is hard to follow sometimes, might be due to the tab code everywhwere.
- 21/01/2005
- 06:58:09
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
You began in the third person and switched to first midway. Personally, i liked the way you had it in third person. Great essay.
- 21/01/2005
- 06:54:58
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I definitely agree with you, they still get their money through concerts anyway, thanks to their exposure through downloads. Nice essay.
- 21/01/2005
- 06:51:36
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
You supply a lot of good information, but some of them seem to need to be more elaborate. Other than that, great timeline.
- 21/01/2005
- 06:46:38
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It shows that you put a ton of effort into it. Very well written, contains a lot of facts. Some things are choppy though.
- 20/01/2005
- 20:40:53
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You put good meaning into it. I'm not good at analyzing poetry so your thoughts after it helped.
- 20/01/2005
- 20:37:04
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I hated this story, but you do a nice summary of it. I like how you point out what idiots the people were for their "tradition".
- 20/01/2005
- 20:30:19
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Not too crazy about your first couple sentences, it feels like you just jump right into it.
- 20/01/2005
- 20:27:45
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Finally, someone stopped blaming it on hormones and genetics. We're all fat and lazy. Nicely written. Seems as though everyone contributes to the fatness.
- 20/01/2005
- 20:24:37
- Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
"During the holidays 60% of death during holidays are alcohol are alcohol related" A lot of your sentences were like that, just try goign through and making things blend together better.
- 20/01/2005
- 20:20:35
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
The pun on the title was cute.. incredibly well written. I like your choice of words.
- 20/01/2005
- 20:17:25
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Kind of strange how you finished it off, I know you're supposed to leave the reader thinking, but a direct question is a bit obvious. It's a bit choppy as well.
- 20/01/2005
- 20:15:11
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I hated learning about that crap. However, your summary on the guy was accurate. Just make sure you site your quotes in the essay.
- 20/01/2005
- 20:13:11
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I agree that college education has become a necessity in modern day society. Your paragraphs seem a bit lengthy, you might want to break thinks up a bit more.
- 20/01/2005
- 20:11:17
- Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I learned a lot from this essay, but maybe you should consider formatting it differently so its more fluent.
- 20/01/2005
- 20:08:48
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I agree that individual nations are not comparable to one another. It truly depends on where you're coming from; the Chinese might feel otherwise about the US having more strenths. Well written though.
- 20/01/2005
- 20:04:31
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I like the way it flows.. makes you feel sad for the kid though.
- 20/01/2005
- 19:56:27
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.