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    As the others have commented, first person pronouns shouldn't be used in an essay. In the sentence "...he would believe that the accused persons spirits was choking the girls...", if "persons" is plural the verb should be "were", if "persons" is singular it shoud be "person's spirit was". More details would be great (maybe more than one paragraph per person with reasons why they did things or more on what they did). Mostly you did a good job.
    • 10/06/2002
    • 10:23:22
    • Score: 20 out of 23 people found this comment useful.