My suggestion is to make the first sentence or two more interesting and eye-catching. The way you started it out causes one to lose some interest in the paper.
- 24/04/2005
- 15:22:54
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Nicely written essay... brings up some interesting issues that weren't discussed in class
- 20/04/2005
- 01:01:27
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I like the essay... I think it's pretty well written, but some things that you need (in my opinion) are transitions to the next sentence. A lot of your sentences end very abruptly, and turn into a new sentence very abruptly. In my mind it doesn't seem to flow... So take my suggestion for what it's worth =)
- 26/03/2005
- 16:23:21
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This is a very nicely written essay with everything laid out in an easy to read/understand way.
- 25/03/2005
- 19:30:01
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
Another very well written essay.
- 24/03/2005
- 15:22:34
- Score: 18 out of 25 people found this comment useful.
Just wanted to say that this was a very well written essay.
- 24/03/2005
- 15:18:25
- Score: 20 out of 28 people found this comment useful.
Use paragraphs or one line spacing between every would be paragraph.
- 23/03/2005
- 15:20:02
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Your paper was a pleasure to read... mentally stimulating xD
- 22/03/2005
- 15:07:18
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.