Essay is very well written and put together. The accompanying sources fill out the essay and make it perfect.
- 04/11/2007
- 08:32:16
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Very usefull and is obvious alot of hard work and time went into this essay. Works cited or bibliography would be very usefull and nice to have...
- 12/03/2006
- 17:06:29
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Very well researched and drawn out. Very helpfull for studying for my political science class.
- 12/03/2006
- 17:01:20
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Could use some more in depth anylization and some research but interesting idea. Caught my attention while I was cruising through the essays.
- 12/03/2006
- 16:59:55
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Loved how you brought the tribe example at the begining of the essay shows a new perspective.I have a tattoo of wings on my back that wraps up over my shoulders close to my neck and has a little tribal design on my chest. all connected with the same theme. Whenever I go swimming or do anything where people can see it I always get evil stares from a couple people. It saddens me people judge me just because of what I look like. To me its on the same level as looking at someone with a disability and judging them.
- 12/03/2006
- 16:57:52
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Never read a essay on this kind of topic. Very cool and exciting read. Thanks
- 12/03/2006
- 16:50:16
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Good thoughts, but it seems this isn't nearly enough content to fully evaluate this controversial subject.
- 12/03/2006
- 16:04:20
- Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Well researched, appreiciated the quality references.
- 12/03/2006
- 16:03:08
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I learned some very new thoughts by your essay. Good writing and research to back it all up.
- 12/03/2006
- 16:02:07
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Very well written essay, thanks for contributing, loved the good research.
- 12/03/2006
- 16:01:05
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Not to slander nintendo elder, but mature video games can have affects on young children over long periods of time. True the majority and mass of the american population is unaffected by mature rated video games and the new media is merely trying to find a reason and incriminates video games. YOu must acknowledge the small population of people who are affected by them...
- 22/06/2005
- 01:54:27
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
The first paragraph got me real interested and was a great start!!! but a little over done by simply being posted repeatedly...
- 21/06/2005
- 20:22:17
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
thanks elder! if i was to redo it, id add some paragraph spacing in there, but i had it just to deliver a speech and the teacher wanted a hard copy so it didnt really matter.
- 21/06/2005
- 20:19:40
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
You start alot of the sentences with He. Also there isnt any markers or spaces to indicate paragraphs. an essential part of any essay. good core content, just a little development and organization could make for a well formed essay
- 20/06/2005
- 01:31:32
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try to make sure you follow the directions for titling your essay and describing it. Only the title goes in the title spot, the description of the assignment and/or an overview of the paper should be the first paragraph in the essay section
- 20/06/2005
- 01:28:54
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only suggestion i have is merely cosmetic, delete the gobbly gook crap that is left over when you copy and paste from word(aka the stuff at the begining of the paragraphs where a tab should be)
- 20/06/2005
- 01:27:25
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First i suggest not to restate so much in your title. you already have it explained at the very begining of the essay. Also when you copy from microsoft word, the tabs and special formatting doesnt carry over either, make sure the paragraphs are clearly depicted, which you did. then delete the extra gobble gook it leaves behind.
- 20/06/2005
- 01:25:12
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"Some people state that playing video games gives the person a bad posture. Who really cares about a bad posture!?!?!? Its not like it will change your life or even damage your body at all."^you said.bad posture can actually lead to serious health problems. i suggest conducting a little bit of research before making rash assumptions. Read the first paragraph of this site. http://www.chiropractic.org/chiroinfo/posture.htmother than that good points. one other thing is the hand-eye coordination is widely used, try thinking of a more creative reason for a stronger essay.
- 14/06/2005
- 01:26:51
- Score: 16 out of 22 people found this comment useful.
i am a personal fanatic of greek and roman gods/deites. it was pretty accurate and good. one thought without researching i thought dionysos was the god who had the crippled leg and worked in the mountain as a smith for zues....but am probably wrong since you did the research.
- 14/06/2005
- 01:23:41
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
i agree with runemaster is it does seem a bit short, and i know teachers at my school may think you whipped it together at the last minute but that may not be the case everywhere. although it may seem obvious the only suggestion i have is to mention some fact it is the prequel book to the Video game Halo: Combat Evolved. Overall great book report
- 14/06/2005
- 01:20:52
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This essay is perfect. I have a process/classification essay due tommorow and this has the perfect amount of irony and entertainment value my prof. will love!! Major props to the author. (slight piece of irony its available on this sight...)
- 18/05/2005
- 21:39:11
- Score: 4 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
Great Bio, used many parts of it, thanks!
- 12/05/2005
- 18:04:57
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Not all new cars are small engined no powered vehicles. Also many new cars are extremely inexpensive to maintain, take any of Honda's cars for example.You state that muscle cars make me people stop and appreciate it. It is not just because they are old, but also because they are rare nowdays. New modern rare sports cars get the same appreciaton and attention.
- 25/04/2005
- 21:23:38
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Very Well Organized Essay, provided usefull information.The Target Market Section Was Extremely Interesting
- 25/04/2005
- 21:18:18
- Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.