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  • Title Problems.

    You've got a lot of errors in your title. It should be "Martin Luther's 95 Theses".
    • 08/09/2005
    • 12:25:10
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Tabs in Formatting.

    I can't read that table to see if your results make any sense.
    • 08/09/2005
    • 10:30:39
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Trolling for Columbine.

    Chris Rock's proposal is humourous, sure. But 'plausible'? I do not think that word means what you think it means.Incidentally, the proposal was to make the bullets cost $5,000 each, not $5 billion.
    • 07/09/2005
    • 13:47:24
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Fix the conclusion.

    "Baa."?!This is a 2nd-year college essay. I think we can do without calling people 'sheep'. If you wish to draw parallels between the movies and the real world, do so with actual examples, of which there are many.This, combined with a sprinkling of spelling/grammar problems, resulted in me giving it a 'yellow' rating.
    • 07/09/2005
    • 13:42:04
    • Score: 0 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Only 8th Grade?

    This is superb for an 8th-grader. My only criticism: where is the bibliography?
    • 06/09/2005
    • 23:46:08
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Rubbish.

    Even for a grade 10 essay, this is severely lacking, and rife with unsupported personal opinions. I would suggest that the author calm down and try to do without the hysteria.
    • 06/09/2005
    • 14:28:09
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Why so many 'yellow' ratings?

    For some reason, half the people rating this have given it a 'yellow'. I think, perhaps, they did not notice what grade this was for. This is above-average for what I would expect to see in middle school!
    • 06/09/2005
    • 14:19:28
    • Score: 0 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done.

    Nicely written. I'm not sure why two other people gave it a 'yellow'; for a high school essay, this is definitely 'green'.Some comparisons between Prohibition and the modern-day drug war could have been insightful; presumably, this was not part of the assignment.
    • 06/09/2005
    • 12:34:26
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Good grief.

    Did the people who gave this a 'green' rating actually read it? This is quite possibly the most incoherant rambling I've ever read. Just look at the last paragraph!
    • 01/09/2005
    • 13:14:40
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • 95%?

    How did this manage to receive a 95%? For a college-level essay, one would expect to see references, instead of rhetoric. While not a Bush fan myself, I do expect criticism to present at least the appearance of research.Even ignoring a few grammatical issues, the author manages to mispell both "Houston" and "Cheney"; later, we are told that the war "stared", then informed of Bush's "brilliants" and how he managed to "loose" jobs. I don't think I need to continue.
    • 30/08/2005
    • 14:29:10
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • A good start.

    Although the formatting is not that of a traditional essay, this is excusable. Presumably, this was a requirement of the assignment.Without knowing the grade level this paper was submitted it, it is difficult to judge the quality precisely. Assuming it is an upper-level high school paper, it deserves its 'green' rating.
    • 30/08/2005
    • 14:14:59
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate?

    There is another essay with the same title immediately before this one. I think one of them should be deleted.
    • 11/08/2005
    • 16:46:55
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.