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  • Way too long

    Your paragraphs are way too long, specifically paragraph 2, 3 and 4. Honestly if you were in an exam most examiners will not even bother marking it as it shows lack of structure. Spread out your ideas into subs and you will get a 2 grades higher or even more!To be honest I couldn't get my self to read it all as it is difficult when you have a paragraph the size of an essay.
    • 24/06/2007
    • 01:18:05
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • O.K

    Only downside was that you retold alot of the story.
    • 26/08/2006
    • 22:12:00
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Can't deny it

    Sadly true whats happeneing.
    • 06/08/2006
    • 00:37:58
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Anwar

    Your description of Anwar's belief seems more cultural/traditional than religious.Also, to say that "Anwar is a typical Muslim man. All his beliefs are the same as any other whose religion is Islam" is contradicting as Muslims from around the world practice or interpret their faith differently, a Muslim from Saudi Arabia will no doubtly follow his religion differently from another man in Turkey or Egypt etc. Different Muslims follow different sects and schools of thought just as a Christian from Nigeria follows his religion differnetly from someone in Australia.
    • 06/08/2006
    • 00:20:43
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Re-Well Written

    " this ritual is apart of their tradition it has religious undertones" Dogface, this practice has NOTHING to do with religion, all over Africa, Animists, Christians and Muslims practice it with little or no knowledge of their fath's stance on this medieval practice.
    • 05/08/2006
    • 23:48:33
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Poor

    This essay is poorly strucutured with no intro and conclusoin.
    • 05/08/2006
    • 23:25:16
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments

    I welcome any comments regarding this creative writing/article. Cheers.
    • 21/05/2006
    • 22:25:05
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Poor effort

    Poorly structured, u got stuck on many things and ended up writing very long sentences, try to be precise and coherent in your writing. Some worthy points but difficult understanding your expression at times.
    • 21/05/2006
    • 03:57:59
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Ok

    It is an ok film review, up to the point and precise and coherent.
    • 14/05/2006
    • 07:17:05
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Ok

    Very original.
    • 14/05/2006
    • 06:55:08
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Very Good.

    Overall, a very good effort on this essay, however, I am not too sure about the rebuttal used in this essay since I am not famliar with religion and C.P.
    • 11/09/2005
    • 10:20:59
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Exceleent

    I liked your story so much that Iam printing it! Very well written, 2 thumbs up!
    • 13/08/2005
    • 07:36:31
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Job Well Done!

    Impressive and very precise, the essay covered everything about Hitler from His ealy life to his concentration camps.
    • 10/08/2005
    • 10:00:21
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Some Improvements

    This essay could be improved, adding Josephine's father would have made it better because he was important, also could of have been more precise with Josephine's emancipation.
    • 10/08/2005
    • 09:45:04
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.