I'm completely against censorship in music because the problem is always with the words. I have freedom of speech and if I speak in a song, I don't want that cut out. America needs to learn how to change the station.Also, very good on the FCC crap. I'm going through a censorship class right now and that info provided might help me on a paper. Thanks.
- 31/01/2007
- 23:22:44
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If only it was more detailed.
- 31/01/2007
- 23:07:36
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"Another theme prevalent in a lot of Disney films... order of things."Please explain how things are anti-democratic. At least give a movie that is like what you are saying.A democratic society has free will, which many Disney characters possess. Simba chose to explore. Cinderella excaped her evil step family to take a chance at the ball.I feel that Disney shows the anti-democratic at the beginning and then shows the struggle to become more democratic. JMO though.
- 31/01/2007
- 23:06:18
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That was good. I was wondering why he wasn't in OHMSS. I think the "Vodka martini. Shaken not stirred" line is another famous line he started.
- 17/01/2007
- 06:41:51
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MLS stands for Major League Soccer. Major League Baseball is MLB. I give you credit for being consistent even though it was wrong.
- 17/01/2007
- 06:22:49
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In your 3rd paragraph, you need to oppress the word oppress. Your third to last paragraph most probably shouldn't say most probably two sentences in a row.
- 17/01/2007
- 06:06:35
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It was difficult to read until the last paragraph which seemed to flow better. I guess you covered everything you had to cover but, while reading it, I felt like you kept jumping around.One thing I didn't like was how you just went straight into RMFC. As a fan I know who they are but my mom wouldn't know who you are talking about. Maybe a sentence that mentions that they are a pro football team in Spain would do. I know you mentioned who they are later in the essay, but it could leave a reader wondering for some time who RMFC is and not paying attention to what you are saying about the business side of the club.
- 17/01/2007
- 05:58:21
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In your intro paragraph, you say people disagree with him so why wouldn't you use that as your third stage of hero? It's not bad but it is a bit redundant. I stopped reading it and started jumping to where I would find your next point.
- 17/01/2007
- 05:32:59
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When you title it Gender Roles I though I was going to get something from the mens side of it all but overall, good job.
- 07/12/2006
- 19:42:20
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All I have to say, after playing 13 years, watching it for 8 years, and officiating 4 years, is you must have been desparate. The facts aren't even right. FIFA LOTG.
- 07/12/2006
- 19:38:06
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I'm guessing you at least like soccer since most people wouldn't write a paper on it. 8-PI'm surprised that you mentioned hockey in an article addressing television. Hockey gets worse ratings than NASCAR. Yes it's physical but there is a reason the penalty box is called the sin bin. They are trying to make the player feel shame for 2 minutes.You come off to me as saying yellow cards are bad for the sport. Cards are used to show that serious fouls won't be tolerated just like there are game misconducts in other sports. I would consider a technical foul in basketball to be about the same as a yellow in soccer.On a different note though, you tend to completely change though from the beginning of a paragraph to the end. More, smaller paragraphs would fix that.
- 07/12/2006
- 19:29:11
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As a person studying music, you put me off when I read in the first line, "Music began to change form the style of the Renaissance to a more complicated form around 1750. The period following the Renaissance is called the Baroque."You imply that the Baroque period begins in 1750 when you say this. Since you are addressing the period of 1600-1820, why bother mentioning the Renaissance period in your opening statement. Instead, give the periods you are going to be covering which are the Baroque and Classical.
- 02/11/2006
- 22:28:09
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Very nice - I'd like to steal this for my term paper because it has all the critical thinking elements but I won't because my prof has already seen my rough draft. You explain concepts really well.
- 02/11/2006
- 22:07:47
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I like it but where did you find this information?
- 02/11/2006
- 21:48:37
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Losing is spelled with one 'o' not two. Also, you only give examples in your last paragraph. Explain to the reader how it is good for the body and people's feelings.
- 02/11/2006
- 21:46:47
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If there was no answer to the question, how could they be lying?
- 02/11/2006
- 21:40:14
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Very good research. I think your wording and tenses could be better though. Some of the sentences need some punctuation to make them easier to read. Overall it is very good.
- 24/08/2005
- 17:45:17
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