Good content, small flaws such as the lack of sentence variation and minor grammar mistkes.
- 08/01/2006
- 19:02:34
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This poem is a favorite of mine, and I enjoyed your analysis of it. It was very well-written, and broke down the simple poem into an easy synopsis that an elementary aged child could understand. Props to ya.:)
- 01/11/2005
- 18:18:33
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You have reasonable notions, but you have to word it better. You state in the topic sentence, '...it became apparent to me that the most important setting piece through out the story was the house the family lived in...this seemed to be a motive for Lizzie's actions..' so readers think that your essay adresses either the topic of which setting in the book was the most important, or what motive was behind Lizzie's actions. Right away, we are confused. Then, at the end, you state, '...that is why I feel it essential for the author to explain every minuet detail of the inner workings of the house. With out it, the reader would have less to go on when trying to figure out why Lizzie killed her step-mother and father...' and gives the appearance that the topic addresses if you feel it is essential for the author to explain every minute detail of the inner workings of th house. You need to be clearer, and better and more creative sentence structure and word choicing should be considered.
- 01/11/2005
- 18:12:15
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It's much too short, so add more elaboration, and explain yourself more. Also, use more sentence variety.
- 27/10/2005
- 20:45:33
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