From an argumentative aspect, this essay appeared to be one-sided. There is a need for a counter-argument to further validate the contents. In addition, in an effot to provide actual credibility, the author should provide the actual citations from the text where the information was acquired. Lastly, there a a few minor spelling errors such as piolate?, maybe pilot was meant and shiney should be spelled shiny. Not meaning to come down so hard, but these are things that are examined when presenting an argumentative essay.mstarks
- 17/09/2002
- 15:59:59
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