User Details For: Beerlover

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  • Some Good Information But . . .

    The information in the essay contained some good information. However, the writer could have made better use of transitions, and sentence variety to make this submission better.
    • 31/01/2007
    • 19:17:56
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Great, But...

    You have some good points in this essay. However, you really need to develop your points and explain them. Make sure every paragraph expands on your central idea.
    • 26/01/2007
    • 12:41:28
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Good Start

    I think this is a great beginning to a story. Develop it further . . let's see where it goes. Why would he need to be "reformatted"? Wht is his "obsession" a problem for the men? Where does he live? What does he do for employment?
    • 20/01/2007
    • 18:07:20
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Great Story, But...

    The story was great, I liked the detail, and the sentence structure used. However, "911" did not exist in the 1960's. Nevertheless, the story was still entertaining.
    • 10/12/2006
    • 15:11:43
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Insightful Information

    I am ASL student, and I have a (Foster) Brother who is deaf. So, the information in your essay rings very true. Great Job!!
    • 06/11/2006
    • 05:41:15
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Foul language was distracting.

    I do not share your beliefs, but I am not easily offended, or shocked. However, I do like to read anything I can get my hands on. And the message in your essay was lost due to the name calling and foul language used.
    • 22/02/2006
    • 20:20:30
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Your position is harsh.

    The essay is good but your position is harsh. Fairy tales are for entertainment, and it is the job of the caregiver to convey that message to the children. Why can't the disabled, ugly, or fat people pretend to be somebody else if it makes them feel better?
    • 22/02/2006
    • 13:10:58
    • Score: 0 out of 2 people found this comment useful.