It's extremely repetitive. "Lennie this. Lennie that. Lennie this. Lennie that." Um...ever heard of pronouns? "He?" But even so, it's not a bad essay, it'd just be better with editing.
- 29/01/2008
- 16:55:16
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I thought that this essay really captured what the movie was about. It really showed the philosophy within the movie, as well as giving some actual facts and a summary about the movie. All in all, great essay. I give it an A :)
- 27/11/2007
- 13:21:47
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It's rather..general. It doesn't really have a main topic; instead, it starts talking about Schindler's List and goes off about random points in the movie that don't need to be mentioned at all. If I submitted this to a teacher, I would get, at most, a C+.
- 27/11/2007
- 13:14:09
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Umm I don't have much to say. This is a good essay! I rate a :) You could make it a little longer/in depth, though.
- 09/10/2007
- 12:08:06
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It's pretty good, but I don't think it's 12th grade. It seems more 8th or 9th..and it's very short. However, it shows an understanding for the topic and you presented it very well. :|
- 09/10/2007
- 11:51:52
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Not bad! Very convincing :)
- 09/03/2006
- 06:53:58
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Also..this is way mature for 1st grade! Try like, I don't know...at LEAST 6th grade.
- 08/03/2006
- 07:10:38
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You use "now" WAY too many times! It makes the essay seem more childish, less proffessional, and just...ew. Reword it so it doesn't include "now".Also, you *really* need to stop using "I"! I mean, this is basic 6th grade L.A. I'm telling you here....use "one" instead.So like, instead of "I think..." then put, "One would think..."
- 08/03/2006
- 06:39:21
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Love it! But remember...HUMANS ARE ANIMALS TOO!!!! Anyways - I'd definitly use it if I needed it :)
- 07/03/2006
- 23:27:41
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Love it! This was a VERY well-written essay, even though I don't need it, I'd use it if I did! Congrats :)
- 05/03/2006
- 23:59:52
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