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  • We Shall Overcome

    It's a good essay although I don't agree with you about letting Hitler win by marrying a Christian... I don't make the link between Hitler and Christianity...his values are totally opposite to Christian Values. Educate yourself.
    • 11/05/2008
    • 18:15:53
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  • The Doctor in John Stainbeck's novel The Pearl

    First of all you spelt the Author's name incorrectly in the title.This is an okay attempt however I don't believe that it is of 'College Undergraduate' substance. It sounds more like Grade 10. The thesis sentence is not too clear; your introduction should be stronger. You said "Not once in his career he refused to aid any of rich people." - support this with evidence from the text. You need to make several grammatical corrections. Is English your first language?"By doing such a thing he already ended Coyotitio's life, without knowing he had done though." - you might have meant 'done so' .Also "But doctor's attitude toward Kino extremely changed" ;But the doctor's...changed extremely.In addition "I am wondering if he actually finished a medical school or a "lies university"." this is not a mature statement that will reinforce your point. A college undergraduate student would never say this.Nice conclusion though.
    • 11/05/2008
    • 10:41:37
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  • Life of the Poor Family

    "The father earns a hundred fifty to two hundred bucks a day depending on the weather of course and the mother of very little amount."Isn't that a lot? Maybe you should use another word in place of 'bucks'. Also you have a spelling/typographical error: "The first child a higHschool graduate" Was the ending some kind of sarcasm? Well I think this was a good effort - just try to make the necessary corrections.
    • 10/03/2008
    • 17:43:11
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  • The three models of memory. How they work individually and together.

    I liked this essay. It was very easy to follow and I think that if someone had no idea what the different types of memory were they'd be enlightened after reading this essay.
    • 03/02/2008
    • 11:32:13
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • The Domesticity of Giraffes by Judith Beveridge. How is the poem associated with the concept of power and powerlessness?

    Good job and interesting analysis. I enjoyed it. You just have a few mistakes for example "As the giraffe licks the salt off the poet's hand" should be the "persona's hand" as the poet is not necessarily the persona. Also,"As she is use " should be " as she is used"
    • 08/12/2007
    • 10:18:29
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • A Tale of Two Cities

    This is one of the most brilliant essays I have read here. I enjoyed reading it and I am definitely going to borrow that book from the library on Monday. Very good use of language,wonderful vocabulary. I just found a few errors that you may want to correct. For example you said that "It can be clearly sent hat this Revolution" I think you meant "It can clearly be said or stated that"? and also "based his metaphorical rising sea on the studied and research" I think you meant "studies and research".
    • 07/12/2007
    • 16:30:57
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • The Life of Harriet Tubman

    Interesting and Insightful. Good job :)
    • 06/12/2007
    • 15:56:07
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Teen Pregnancy in the U.S.A

    Informative. Good work for your level, just a few grammatical errors for example "said the advise"
    • 06/12/2007
    • 15:45:48
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Exploration of Outer Space

    This essay showed maturity of thought to a certain extent. It was quite insightful and I liked it until I came to this line "you may think mars doesn't have shit". Such language should not be used when writing formal essays. Good attempt overall.
    • 05/12/2007
    • 18:05:40
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice!

    Very sentimental essay..I like it...haha..I love cartoons..
    • 19/10/2006
    • 13:19:56
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay

    Well organized! Deep insight!!!
    • 18/10/2006
    • 15:45:11
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.