User Details For: applejuice

Essay List
Comments List
  • EXCELLENT !!

    GREAT ESSAY! Best I've read so far! Some minor improvements: Dont repeat yourself, and there is too much infomation in the intro that doesn't help the essay.
    • 07/11/2006
    • 01:45:42
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Great!

    2nd to last paragraph is a bit out of place, the essay is on the book. You need to intergrate lots of quotes into it to support your essay. Don't make them up! Learn them. Also its not a good idea to say "In conclusion". Exellent Essay !!
    • 07/11/2006
    • 01:39:40
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Structure

    Paragraphs should be used to describe 1 point. Quotes are not paragraphs. Needs more quotes, and they all should be interegrated. Also too much theme, you need to focus on a few main points to do with maturity. Quality not quantity! Otherwise good essay, nice job.
    • 07/11/2006
    • 01:32:11
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.