User Details For: johndylan

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  • Detail

    While this essay covers some rudiments it lacks comprehensive detail. However is more than necessary for high school level for a mid range response.
    • 01/04/2007
    • 21:04:05
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Beginning

    You never start a piece of work with, "to start of I disagree" That should become apparent through your essay and shouldn't need to be explicitly stated. Something like "Drug testing in schools is fundamentally wrong.... based on these principals..." It sounds more forceful and persuasive.
    • 19/01/2007
    • 17:28:42
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Techniques

    Although this essay gives some of the thematic concerns of the works it fails to cover the use of techniques and they way techniques contribute to the final meaning. This addition would make it much more useful.
    • 19/01/2007
    • 17:22:38
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Doesn't Completely cover it...

    Although this essay covers the nuts and bolts of the topic, it leaves out much of the aboriginal spirituality which explains the reasons behind the problems of the stolen generation, etc, it needs more work in my eyes on this factor.
    • 18/01/2007
    • 18:20:24
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.