I like how unbiased this paper is. I.E: Vinyl is the only way to DJ. You stepped back from the paper and presented only facts and built on that. You put together a very informative paper.
- 21/03/2008
- 21:40:56
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You need to use spell check before submitting essays.Your title is spelled wrong and you substitute "are" for "our" many many times.Also, watch your tenses...you should not have different tenses in a single sentence.Besides that it is a good essay with pretty good information and cites. Length is a plus too. Thanks for submitting.
- 15/01/2008
- 19:28:28
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Your intro paragraph makes the story sound like it was just a coincidental meeting that led to the story instead of a premeditated act.///When the protagonist/narrator asks the antagonist if he wants to turn back, is there IRONY in this question? Does he really care about the man's health? Is there IRONY in the phrase that the cold will not be the death of the man??? You missed the opportunity to develop the IRONY of the story and also did not follow through with a fully developed discussion of POINT OF VIEW./// Don't bring up a new point (guilt) in the conclusion paragraph that was not developed in the body of the essay. The conclusion paragraph is a summary of all of the key points in your essay.
- 09/11/2007
- 11:21:28
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For a middle school level this essay is quite good. All the main points were hit and disscussed properly. Just run it through a spell check next time.
- 21/01/2007
- 18:19:00
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There is much more to be said on this subject for it is a very broad one.
- 18/01/2007
- 15:44:56
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