This is an good exploration into Boo Radley's character through a creative writing piece. I think it would be hard to write Boo's thoughts since the character hardly vocalizes them in the novel.
- 10/01/2009
- 20:03:18
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This is a good essay. I like how you concluded by finding a connection between the subjects of your body paragraphs.
- 10/01/2009
- 19:59:13
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This essay is very well-written. There is a good thesis, organization, and substantiation.
- 10/01/2009
- 19:56:17
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The thesis has potential to make a great essay and the essay demonstrates good organization. A few suggestions are that you could try to avoid run-on sentences, to vary word choice, and to conclude paragraphs in a way that transitions the train of thought to the topic of the next paragraph.
- 10/01/2009
- 19:54:10
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This essay has a good thesis, is well-organized, and has good support for the argument.
- 10/01/2009
- 19:47:36
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This is a well-written and organized essay with good arguments and substantiation. I'd like to suggest that you avoid just including a quote in the middle of the essay without any detail before or after the quote as you did in the fourth paragraph, second sentence.
- 10/01/2009
- 19:43:21
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You bring up interesting points but there are so many spelling mistakes/grammar mistakes/typos that they detract from what could be a much better piece of writing.
- 10/01/2009
- 19:36:56
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This is a really good paper. I particularly liked your style of writing. The thesis of 'there's lots of troubles and obstacles, but everything works out in the end' isn't very forceful but it's alright. Perhaps that was the essay prompt.
- 21/11/2008
- 07:42:39
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This is a well-written essay. I liked how you used a fog metaphor to explain the conflict between Elizabeth and Mr. Darcy. However, I do feel there is a lot of plot summary that is unnecessary in making your argument.
- 21/11/2008
- 07:35:13
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This is a good essay. I totally agree that Mr. Wickham is the supporting character who is most instrumental in bringing about Elizabeth and Mr. Darcy's realizations. There are a lot of quotation marks in your essay, especially around a single word. If they're actually quotes, they should be cited with the page number.
- 12/11/2008
- 17:57:24
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Is this essay about only the novel Pride and Prejudice by Jane Austen? Or does it also talk about a film interpretation? Who is Simon Langton? This is all very ambiguous. Also, the first line about a single man in possession of a large fortune is the narrator speaking (at least in the novel) rather than Elizabeth speaking.
- 06/11/2008
- 10:51:46
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I agree with zombiesgirl. Jane Austen's books are generally about matchmaking, wooing, and all activities involved in the pursuit of marriage. The end of the novel is marriage and who ends up with who. Not only are both Mr. Darcy and Elizabeth guilty of pride and prejudice, other couples in the novel are as well.
- 05/11/2008
- 17:43:50
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I think you should be more specific about your examples to prove your thesis. You should explain each point and quote the particular few words that pertain to your point, instead of including a very long quote like in the fourth paragraph and letting it speak for itself.
- 04/11/2008
- 16:29:32
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this has a good argument and is well-substantiated. i'd suggest varying sentence structure because a lot of sentences start with "Mr. Collins" or "he".
- 04/11/2008
- 16:22:12
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Your essay contains good ideas, but it lacks focus. There is no introduction paragraph. The first paragraph jumps directly to the first point of Hester being innocent. You need a introduction paragraph with a thesis and constantly relate arguments in the body paragraphs back to the thesis. All the paragraphs are also just regurgitations of facts and quotes with no analysis. There is also no conclusion, because the last paragraph contains facts instead of closing up the argument.If your thesis is the first sentence, include why these three biblical references are crucial to the story. Do they help character development, plot development, expansion of themes or motifs? You know how to substantiate, but you need more expand on and phrase your arguments better.
- 15/02/2007
- 13:12:31
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