seems more like a summary than an essay!i dont think essays should have personal comments in them
- 14/07/2008
- 21:49:32
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this is a pretty good papertry to use a stronger argument as this will capture the reader and you will get more marksalso, try not to use apostrophes in essays
- 09/05/2008
- 04:57:35
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
very strong essay!
- 09/05/2008
- 03:43:17
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great essay!good use of vocab
- 09/05/2008
- 02:43:38
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
this seems to be a pretty engaging speech.you could make the audience more attentive and engaged by ending on a high.e.g. We are all individuals, but together, we can make a difference.something like that.
- 08/05/2008
- 06:11:08
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
great essay mate!
- 08/05/2008
- 06:04:00
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it seems that this is not an essaybut rather a report on software and its qualitieshowever, it is still usefulbetter luck next time mate
- 08/05/2008
- 03:48:39
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
its a pretty good essay, except you didn't answer the question or title of the essay, 'child labor'.there is little if not no information or even arguments concerning child labor.make sure that you answer the question, and try not to get too excited and start writing completely off the topic.
- 05/05/2008
- 06:34:03
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
woooww!this is such a good essay/report.You have incorporated great use of statistics and information which make this very strong and reliable.
- 05/05/2008
- 06:26:59
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
this is a pretty good essayi would advise you to think about using more imagery, which will surely give you more marks in the future.
- 05/05/2008
- 06:25:43
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.