It's funny but I really did read you piece, and felt that the end statement was going to be the entire opposite. I was surprised when you wrote anything but a condemnation of a nation of thugs and bullies who tacitly condone the murder of civilians.
- 13/02/2009
- 06:59:16
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1. "...at least on the levels below the very 'top' of a given social scene, men and women compete..." = What does this generalised tripe mean?If you are going to write on a topic "...Male Psyche and Porn" you failed to even mention Gay in your wide ranging topics. Unfortunately you chose to write the male vs female argument. Could have been so much better, but you marginalised your paper by being trie and hackneyed.If you really read "Ego and the Id', you didn't understand it.
- 13/02/2009
- 06:55:00
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You seem to be trying to convince people of this through repetition."I truly feel that going to Pakistan improved my Pakistani language (Urdu) skills. Nowadays I speak Urdu anywhere and anyway I know how. There was nothing like experiencing the Pakistani language (Urdu) and....."It's like saying English is the main language of English speakers in China, I'm glad you didn't dare say it's the national or native language, then I'd question your research.
- 09/02/2009
- 04:52:37
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If his inventory return is lower than industry average he may have a problem with stocking the correct inventory. His assertion of losing sales due to not having stock on hand may back this up. It may be an idea to look at marketing and product mix as well
- 01/02/2009
- 06:24:38
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This got through as a bachelor's. Your references are from an "ezine". This just makes it as a blog, never mind an essay/assignment at bachelor's level.
- 01/02/2009
- 05:26:48
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There are some huge generalisations here, and some huge leaps in logic, for example the reasons for the chronic drug use, and the reasons why "Communist" North Vietnam - "attacked" Untagged South Vietnam.
- 10/08/2008
- 07:07:51
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This is an outline, or brief for a promotion/distribution plan, etc. A plan would need to be a whole lot more detailed. There are a lot of "givens" here that would need to be tested and supported.
- 10/08/2008
- 04:33:33
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A good beginning and middle, when you wrote "...punishment for crime focused more on retribution than on rehabilitation...", I thought you were going to comment on his demise - a suspicious end to a great career. Great to see a good piece here about one of the greats
- 08/08/2008
- 07:12:26
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A really fantastic piece of work, well referenced. A good comparison of the different style of the two artists, a little more on what was going on politically at the time always helps to "flesh out" the artist's intentions, but hey - year 8, not bad at all.
- 08/08/2008
- 06:23:52
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Structure is OK, however if you cited some of the "Tibetan Book of the Dead" your comment "....Buddhism have an idea of reincarnation" would have a little more substance.
- 08/08/2008
- 05:30:44
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You haven't even cited this piece, having traveled to Nepal numerous times I can offer the following - Dipendra's younger brother was killed at the palace - and his name was not Gyanendra. As next in line to the throne, Dipendra was correctly announced as King on the demise of his father. Dipendra was never charged so he was never tried - this is not some "law" in Nepal. You really didn't forward any information about Nepali culture.
- 04/08/2008
- 04:20:55
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There are no references to this work,
- 03/08/2008
- 02:34:39
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You use the term self esteem, I could not find your definition of this - there were definitions of most other terms. In many Asia societies, self esteem equates closely to a collective term "face". In many Asian societies making decisions without reference to other members of society (as is frequently done in Australia)would be seen as pathological.
- 28/07/2008
- 07:21:31
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Ruisdael was around 42 when he painted this, he was headed for the "winter" of his life, along with sectors of the lowlands artistic community. One thing that you touched on here was Ruisdael's work with clouds - a comparison with other works of his would have been uselful. His use of subtle contrast was underrated by many.
- 27/07/2008
- 06:52:17
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.."came to mind is the totalitarian states of Nazi Germany.." Plural/singular, or is it the states of Nazi and Germany?Spellchecker, and a "review" tool would be a good start, then work on this "opinion" based essay, and propel it toward a more reference based university assignment.As for the "A" grade, i'll take it that that was also a spelling mistake.
- 30/06/2008
- 07:23:33
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