This is a very good contrast/comparison of Vygotsky and Piaget. The main point were concisely highlighted so that it make it easy to distinguish between the two psychologists
- 23/09/2009
- 12:50:53
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This is a pretty good historical context, overall, of slavery and freedom
- 11/03/2009
- 09:12:59
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Ok, so there are some grammar errors, but if this is a personal journal entry or an assignment for creative writing, I found this really entertaining!
- 14/01/2009
- 11:05:00
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After reading the thought process on a different affirmative action (AA) essay, this is just a breath of fresh air! You are so eloquent in outlining what AA means and the process as well as the importance. I also like how you explain the problems with common thought process of AA, such as "the best person should be hired," or that "hard work will take you where you want to get to." If you are as passionate about social issues (such as AA) as you are in your paper, you should really consider a helping profession field, I have a feeling you'll go far! Also, if you are interested in learning more about diversity issues, read "The 10 Lenses," by Mark A. Williams.
- 12/01/2009
- 07:41:31
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You pose a really interesting discussion in your paper, and you did a good job outlining the components of the FMLA. Although, what would be some of your recommendations to how to better handle the penalties? Good job!
- 12/01/2009
- 07:29:25
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I know you are a high school student, and you have a lot more to learn, but your insight on affirmative action is really misguided. First, being that this is a journalism article doesn't exclude the fact that you need a citation when you say "Studies have shown that African Americans, regardless of their financial status, are discriminated against in activities ranging from a job search to going out to dinner." Yes, this may be true, but where is your evidence? As far as the corporate world hiring process, spend a day in Human Resources, and you will find that they just do not accept resumes/application from those who do don't meet the right criteria. These corporations do not pull black people (or any other minority, for that matter) off the street and say, "we need to fill a quota, so here's a job for you." Actually, most interview processes are intense by first selecting a group of highly skilled and educated people for the job, and after rounds of interviews they narrow it on a few candidates, and finally, from there, a decision may be based off ethnicity. You do bring up a good point about keeping things current by having the companies monitored (and there are such organization who do just that such as the BBB), but without affirmative action, many business would be run by an elitist boy's club. Remember, affirmative action also helps white people as well -- white women; do a little research on the "glass ceiling" and your learn more about it.
- 12/01/2009
- 07:20:20
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It looks like you put a lot of critical thinking into this essay, while also explaining the importance of affirmative action and what it stands for. I take a great interest in this subject, and you presented the topic in a very thoughtful, unbiased way.
- 10/01/2009
- 09:46:16
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Although you are clear on the central idea of your topic, your main points are not developed in a clear and concise manner. When calling the UK a "multicultural society" you need to be more specific in what deems this country as multicultural. As for the structure of this essay you use common words accurately, but the sentence structure appears overly simplistic and unsophisticated. With a bit more work, this has the potential to be a really good essay!
- 10/01/2009
- 09:28:06
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It appears that you have through knowledge on this subject and strong supporting sentences that show clear organization that develops your major points. However, it would of been nice to hear your own critical analysis and ideas on marketing mix.
- 10/01/2009
- 09:17:39
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